网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat clear but incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about your experience.

示例: I started using the Internet when I was in high school. At that time, I had to pay 50,000 pesos per hour to access it, mainly to research for my assignments. It was amazing because it opened up a new world of information that was previously hard to find.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and finish your sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples related to your work.

示例: Nowadays, I go online frequently because of my job. As an operations manager in a travel and tour agency, I often browse the internet to check client requests and update guidelines, which helps me manage my tasks efficiently.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your sentences and provide more specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I remember in college when the Internet was widely available, but our teachers advised us to limit our use, especially social media, because it could negatively affect our grades and consume too much of our study time.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by linking your ideas more smoothly and providing more specific examples. Avoid mixing tenses and ensure your sentences are complete.

示例: Yes, I definitely spend a lot of time online, especially because social media is my main way to communicate with my family. Additionally, my coworkers and I often search online to learn new information related to our work.

建议: Your answer is good but could be enhanced by adding more specific examples and using linking words to improve coherence. Try to expand your answer slightly within the sentence limit.

示例: Nowadays, I can't imagine my life without the Internet. Firstly, my work relies on it to communicate with colleagues and clients through social media. Moreover, it helps me stay connected with my family, especially when we are far apart.

× I remember the time I had to pay 50,000 pesos an hour just to use an Internet and browse resources for my assignment.

✓ I remember the time I had to pay 50,000 pesos an hour just to use the Internet and browse resources for my assignment.

The word 'Internet' is a unique noun and should be preceded by the definite article 'the' when referring to it as a specific entity. Using 'an Internet' is incorrect because 'Internet' is not a countable noun in this context.

× It was amazing at first time because I was.

✓ It was amazing the first time because I was excited.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear predicate after 'I was.' Adding 'excited' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. Also, 'at first time' should be 'the first time' to be grammatically correct.

× Nowadays, uh, I go online often times because of the nature of my work.

✓ Nowadays, uh, I go online often because of the nature of my work.

The phrase 'often times' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'often.' Also, adverbs like 'often' should be placed before the main verb for proper sentence flow.

× Since I am an operations manager in a travel and tour agency, I had to browse a lot to check for clients, for guidelines and.

✓ Since I am an operations manager in a travel and tour agency, I have to browse a lot to check for clients and guidelines.

The sentence mixes present tense ('I am') with past tense ('I had to'). To maintain consistency, the verb should be in the present tense ('have to') because the job is current. Also, the sentence was incomplete and was corrected for clarity.

× I remember back in college where Internet was widely used in the school already, but we were told by our teachers that we have to limit accessing the Internet, especially the social media because it can affect our grades and consume our.

✓ I remember back in college when the Internet was already widely used in the school, but we were told by our teachers that we have to limit accessing the Internet, especially social media, because it can affect our grades and consume our time.

The phrase 'where Internet was widely used' is incorrect; 'when the Internet was already widely used' is appropriate for time reference. Also, 'the social media' should be 'social media' without 'the' because 'social media' is an uncountable noun. The sentence was incomplete and was completed for clarity.

× Yes, I definitely spend a lot of time online, especially right now that social media is the means of communication to convey my message to my family.

✓ Yes, I definitely spend a lot of time online, especially now that social media is the means of communication to convey my messages to my family.

The phrase 'right now that' is awkward; 'especially now that' is more natural. Also, 'message' should be plural 'messages' to indicate multiple communications. The verb tense is correct here.

× My coworkers and I had to search a lot to learn things.

✓ My coworkers and I have to search a lot to learn things.

The past tense 'had to' conflicts with the present context implied by the previous sentence. Changing to present tense 'have to' maintains consistency with the current situation.

× First and foremost, my work needs Internet or social media to communicate with my colleagues and our clients.

✓ First and foremost, my work needs the Internet or social media to communicate with my colleagues and our clients.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to it as a specific entity. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× Additionally, the Internet is our main communication with my family.

✓ Additionally, the Internet is our main means of communication with my family.

The phrase 'main communication' is incorrect; it should be 'main means of communication.' This correction clarifies the intended meaning and improves grammatical accuracy.