网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use past tense consistently and structure your answer clearly. Start with a direct response, then add details. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'.

示例: I started using the internet when I was in secondary school. At that time, it was mainly for research and school projects.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific details to enrich the response.

示例: I use the internet every day because I need it for both work and study. For example, I often research information and communicate with colleagues online.

建议: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use past tense and avoid filler words. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

示例: Yes, I remember a time when I was not allowed to use the internet because I got low scores at school. As a result, my mother restricted my internet access to help me focus on studying.

建议: Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Provide specific reasons for your opinion.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I use the internet not only for studying and working but also for relaxation. Therefore, I sometimes find it hard to limit my screen time.

建议: Use correct verb tenses and plural forms. Add linking words and more specific details to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time with my friends and family. For instance, we might go to markets or restaurants to enjoy meals together.

× I remember correctly, uh, the first times I use the Internet when I am a student who study as secondary school.

✓ I remember correctly, uh, the first times I used the Internet when I was a student studying in secondary school.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verbs should be in the past tense ('used' instead of 'use', 'was' instead of 'am'). Also, 'study' should be in the present participle form 'studying' to describe the ongoing action in the past.

× I use the Internet every day to work or study.

✓ I use the Internet every day to work or study.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The present simple tense is appropriate here to describe habitual actions.

× Well, I remember umm, there's a times I can not allow uh to you the Internet when I achieve low score at the academic so my mom don't.

✓ Well, I remember, umm, there were times I was not allowed to use the Internet when I achieved low scores academically, so my mom didn't allow it.

'There's a times' is incorrect; 'there were times' is correct for plural. 'Can not allow uh to you the Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'was not allowed to use the Internet'. 'Achieve low score' should be 'achieved low scores'. 'At the academic' is incorrect; 'academically' is the correct adverb. 'My mom don't' should be 'my mom didn't' to match past tense and subject-verb agreement.

× I think yes, because, uh, besides, I use the Internet to, uh, serve my studying and even my working. So I you in the nest to, uh, relaxations.

✓ I think yes, because, uh, besides, I use the Internet to support my studying and even my work. So I use it next to, uh, relax.

'Serve my studying and even my working' is awkward; 'support my studying and even my work' is better. 'I you in the nest to, uh, relaxations' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'I use it next to, uh, relax.' Pronouns and word choices were incorrect or unclear.

× When I don't use the Internet, I will hang out with my friend or families to go the markets or restaurants to eat some things.

✓ When I don't use the Internet, I will hang out with my friends or family to go to the markets or restaurants to eat something.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context. 'Families' should be 'family' as a collective noun. 'Go the markets' needs the preposition 'to' as 'go to the markets'. 'Eat some things' is awkward; 'eat something' is more natural.