网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且有重复词汇。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意时态和介词的正确使用。

示例: I started using the internet when I was about 6 or 8 years old. There was an internet cafe near my old house, and I became friends with the owner. From then on, I used the internet on his computer.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅的问题，且缺少连贯的连接词。建议使用更准确的时态和连接词，使回答更自然连贯。

示例: I usually go to the internet cafe two or three times a week, but I go online every day because my college courses require me to complete important assignments on the computer. Besides, I also use my smartphone daily.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，代词使用不当，且表达不够清晰。建议注意代词的一致性，简化句子结构，并使用更准确的词汇。

示例: When I was in evening school, I used my mother's smartphone every night. I told her I was doing homework, but actually I was chatting with my friends. One day, she found out I was lying and banned me from using her phone.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，且有重复和不连贯的地方。建议使用更准确的表达方式，避免重复，并使句子更流畅。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, about 10 to 12 hours a day on my phone. It's not good, but I find it hard to stop because there are two American TV series on my phone that I really enjoy watching.

建议: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，存在重复和语法错误。建议完整回答问题，避免重复，并使用连贯的句子表达想法。

示例: If there were no internet, I would spend more time shopping at different stores like Herma or Sam's Club. I would also visit beautiful western restaurants with my friends and take photos to enjoy our time together.

× And so from that time I started to using the Internet by his computer.

✓ And so from that time I started to use the Internet on his computer.

动词start后面接动词不定式to do，而不是to doing。这里应该用不定式to use，而不是动名词using。

× Well, I go to Internet bar about, uh, two or three days a time and, uh, I go online.

✓ Well, I go to the Internet bar about two or three times a week, and I go online.

这里的表达不正确，应该用复数形式times表示次数，且习惯表达是go to the Internet bar。

× It must be every day because uh, my college courses has many, uh, important works we have to do in the computer.

✓ It must be every day because, uh, my college courses have many important tasks we have to do on the computer.

courses是复数，谓语动词应使用have而不是has。works用法不当，改为tasks更合适。

× And, uh, of course I play smartphone every day.

✓ And, uh, of course I play on my smartphone every day.

play后面需要介词on来表示使用设备，且应加上物主代词my。

× I played a smartphone every night by my mother's smartphone.

✓ I played on my mother's smartphone every night.

play后面应使用介词on，且不需要冠词a。

× But, uh, actually I was just chatting with my friends on her smartphone. And one day he found that I was lying.

✓ But, uh, actually I was just chatting with my friends on her smartphone. And one day she found that I was lying.

前文提到的是mother，应该用she而不是he。

× He, uh, he banned me to play her phone.

✓ She, uh, she banned me from using her phone.

主语应为she，且banned后面应接介词短语from using，而不是to play。

× Every day has been 10 to uh, 12 hours on my cell phone.

✓ Every day, I spend 10 to 12 hours on my cell phone.

原句结构不完整，缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整句子。

× Maybe it's a bad habit, but I can't stand myself because all my smartphone there are two mini American TV series.

✓ Maybe it's a bad habit, but I can't help myself because on my smartphone there are two mini American TV series.

can't stand myself用法不当，正确表达是can't help myself。且句子中缺少介词on。

× Uh, they just wait for me to tap them and look them.

✓ Uh, they just wait for me to tap them and watch them.

look后面需要介词at或者用watch表示观看，且look them不正确。

× If there is no.

✓ If there is no internet.

句子不完整，缺少宾语internet。