网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时时态使用不准确，且句子较长且有些冗余。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意时态一致性，并避免重复表达。

示例: I started using the internet when I was in junior high school after my parents bought me a computer. I often shared interesting experiences with my friends online and sometimes played computer games in the evening to relax.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，且句子不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用恰当的连接词。

示例: I go online almost every day because I need to check important messages for my work. Besides, I also use the internet to keep in touch with my friends.

建议: 回答中时态混乱，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态，简洁表达原因，并避免语法错误。

示例: Yes, I remember when I was in junior high school, my parents didn't allow me to use the internet because I had a lot of homework. They were worried I would spend too much time playing computer games.

建议: 回答不连贯，语法错误多，表达不完整。建议使用完整句子，注意语法和逻辑连贯性。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online every day. It takes up a lot of my time and energy. However, I need to use the computer for work and to keep in touch with others.

建议: 回答中存在拼写错误，语法错误，且表达不清晰。建议注意拼写，使用正确的语法结构，并清晰表达观点。

示例: To be honest, life without the internet would be inconvenient and boring. I wouldn't be able to share interesting topics or communicate with my friends every day.

× I remembered that when I was studying junior high school, my parents bought a computer for me and I started using the Internet.

✓ I remember that when I was studying in junior high school, my parents bought a computer for me and I started using the Internet.

这里使用过去时态的“remembered”不符合上下文，因为说话者是在回忆过去的事情时表达现在的记忆，应该用一般现在时“remember”。

× I usually shared my interesting experience with my friends online, and sometimes in the evening I choose to play computer games, which really make me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ I usually share my interesting experiences with my friends online, and sometimes in the evening I choose to play computer games, which really makes me feel happy and relaxed.

“shared”应为一般现在时“share”，因为描述习惯动作；“experience”应为复数“experiences”；“make”应与主语“which”单数形式一致，改为“makes”。

× I remembered that when I was studying junior high school, my parents bought a computer for me and I started using the Internet.

✓ I remember that when I was studying in junior high school, my parents bought a computer for me and I started using the Internet.

“studying junior high school”缺少介词，应为“studying in junior high school”。

× Moreover, I also can have to contact contact my friends with my friends.

✓ Moreover, I also have to contact my friends.

句子中“can have to”用法错误，应去掉“can”；“contact contact”重复；“contact my friends with my friends”结构错误，应简化为“contact my friends”。

× I remembered that when I was studying in junior high school, I had some study and homework to do, so my parents don't didn't allow me to use the Internet because it takes me too much time and I'm very interested in playing computer games, so they worried me immerse them.

✓ I remember that when I was studying in junior high school, I had some study and homework to do, so my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet because it took me too much time and I was very interested in playing computer games, so they worried I would be immersed in them.

“remembered”应为一般现在时“remember”；“don't didn't”重复，应为“didn't”；“takes”应为过去时“took”；“I'm”应为过去时“I was”；“worried me immerse them”表达错误，应改为“worried I would be immersed in them”。

× I spend online nearly every day, so I really spend too much time online.

✓ I spend time online nearly every day, so I really spend too much time online.

“spend online”缺少宾语，应为“spend time online”。

× Just occupied my time and my brain.

✓ It just occupies my time and my brain.

句子缺少主语，应加“It”；“occupied”时态错误，应为一般现在时“occupies”。

× I need to use computer to deal with my work and stay touch.

✓ I need to use the computer to deal with my work and stay in touch.

“use computer”缺少冠词，应为“use the computer”；“stay touch”应为固定搭配“stay in touch”。

× To be honest, without Internet the life may be very unconvenient and uninteresting because I can do more interesting things and shared interesting topic with my friends online.

✓ To be honest, without the Internet, life may be very inconvenient and uninteresting because I cannot do more interesting things or share interesting topics with my friends online.

“without Internet”缺少冠词，应为“without the Internet”；“the life”应为“life”；“unconvenient”拼写错误，应为“inconvenient”；“shared”时态错误，应为“share”；句意应为不能做这些事，故用“cannot”。

× But without the Internet my life will be boring and I can't meet my friends every day and count.

✓ But without the Internet, my life will be boring and I can't meet my friends every day and chat.

“and count”用词错误，应为“and chat”或其他合适表达；句中缺少逗号。