网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 文法の誤り（"I was learned"は不自然）を修正し、より自然な表現にしましょう。また、情報を検索した理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。

示例: I started using the internet when I was about 10 years old because my father bought me a personal computer. At that time, I was learning ballet, so I often searched for information about dance and ballet online.

建议: 回答は簡潔で良いですが、もう少し具体的な頻度や理由を加えるとより効果的です。例えば、どのくらいの時間オンラインにいるかや、なぜ投稿が好きかを説明しましょう。

示例: I go online every day, usually for a few hours. I enjoy posting on social media platforms like X and Instagram because it allows me to connect with friends and share my experiences.

建议: 文法と語順の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去の経験を時系列で整理し、明確に表現しましょう。

示例: Yes, there was a time when my parents used the internet on their smartphones for work, so I couldn't use it. I was very happy when my father finally bought me my own smartphone.

建议: 文法の誤りと不自然な表現（"my university is class"）を修正し、理由を明確に述べましょう。また、「インターネット依存症」という表現は少し強いので、適切な言葉を選びましょう。

示例: Definitely yes. I can't help using my devices during my free time. Also, since my university classes require internet access every day, I spend a lot of time online, which sometimes feels like an addiction.

建议: 時制の一致と自然な表現に注意しましょう。未来の仮定の話なので、過去形ではなく未来形を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが大切です。

示例: I think I would read books if I were not allowed to use the internet. I would spend most of my time reading throughout the day.

× I was learned ballet dance at the time, so I searched about information about dance and ballet.

✓ I was learning ballet dance at the time, so I searched for information about dance and ballet.

The phrase 'I was learned' is incorrect because 'learned' is the past tense and past participle form of 'learn', but here the past continuous tense is needed to indicate an ongoing action in the past. The correct form is 'I was learning'. Also, 'searched about information' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'searched for information'.

× I was learned ballet dance at the time, so I searched about information about dance and ballet.

✓ I was learning ballet dance at the time, so I searched for information about dance and ballet.

The verb 'search' is usually followed by the preposition 'for' when indicating the object of the search. Using 'about' after 'searched' is incorrect. Therefore, it should be 'searched for information'. This correction improves the prepositional usage.

× I like to post in social media such as X or Instagram.

✓ I like to post on social media such as X or Instagram.

The correct preposition to use with 'post' and 'social media' is 'on', not 'in'. We say 'post on social media' to indicate the platform where the content is shared.

× Yes, my parents used Internet by smartphone to work and I really want to use it but I can't so I'm I was so glad to my father bought me a smartphone.

✓ Yes, my parents used the Internet on their smartphones to work, and I really wanted to use it but couldn't, so I was very glad when my father bought me a smartphone.

The original sentence has several issues: 'used Internet by smartphone' should be 'used the Internet on their smartphones' to correctly use the article and preposition. 'I really want to use it but I can't so I'm I was so glad' is confusing and mixes tenses; it should be 'I really wanted to use it but couldn't, so I was very glad'. Also, 'to my father bought me' is incorrect; it should be 'when my father bought me'. Pronouns and verb forms need to be consistent and clear.

× Yes, my parents used Internet by smartphone to work and I really want to use it but I can't so I'm I was so glad to my father bought me a smartphone.

✓ Yes, my parents used the Internet on their smartphones to work, and I really wanted to use it but couldn't, so I was very glad when my father bought me a smartphone.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the event happened in the past, verbs should be in the past tense: 'wanted' instead of 'want', 'couldn't' instead of 'can't', and 'was' instead of 'am'. This maintains tense consistency.

× my parents used Internet by smartphone to work

✓ my parents used the Internet on their smartphones to work

The phrase 'used Internet by smartphone' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'on' when referring to using the Internet via a device, and 'smartphones' should be plural and possessive pronoun 'their' added for clarity.

× I can't help using my devices in my free time.

✓ I can't help using my devices in my free time.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× Also I access the Internet every day because my university is class and it makes me Internet addiction.

✓ Also, I access the Internet every day because of my university classes, and it makes me addicted to the Internet.

The phrase 'because my university is class' is incorrect; it should be 'because of my university classes' to indicate the reason. Also, 'it makes me Internet addiction' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'it makes me addicted to the Internet'. This corrects preposition use and noun/adjective form.

× it makes me Internet addiction.

✓ it makes me addicted to the Internet.

'Internet addiction' is a noun phrase, but here an adjective is needed to describe the state of the subject. The correct form is 'addicted to the Internet' to express the condition properly.

× I think that I will read books when I was not allowed to use Internet.

✓ I think that I will read books when I am not allowed to use the Internet.

The sentence mixes future tense 'will read' with past tense 'was not allowed'. To maintain consistency, the time clause should be in the present tense 'am not allowed' when referring to a future hypothetical situation. Also, 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the'.

× I think that I will read books when I was not allowed to use Internet.

✓ I think that I will read books when I am not allowed to use the Internet.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to the global network. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× I spend my time to read books all the day.

✓ I spend my time reading books all day.

The verb 'spend' is followed by a gerund, not an infinitive, so 'to read' should be 'reading'. Also, 'all the day' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'all day' without 'the'.