网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“use Internet”应为“use the Internet”，并且句子结构可以更自然流畅。可以增加连接词使内容更连贯。

示例: I started using the Internet when I was in primary school. At that time, I created my first QQ and WeChat accounts. I often used the computer to play games and chat with my friends.

建议: 回答中出现多余的连接词“and”，应避免。表达应更准确，如“finish my school assignment by the the Internet”应为“finish my school assignments using the Internet”。

示例: I go online almost every day. Sometimes, I text my family and friends, and other times, I use the Internet to complete my school assignments.

建议: 回答较好，但有语法错误，如“it's would be”应为“it would be”。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: Yes, when I was in high school, my parents did not allow me to use the Internet because they thought it would harm my studies.

建议: 时态使用不当，如“spent”应为“spend”。句子结构不完整，如“Most of the time I just using”应为“I mostly use”。注意大小写，如“tiktok”应为“TikTok”。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Currently, I spend about seven hours a day. Most of the time, I use WeChat to text my friends or watch videos on TikTok.

建议: 表达不够自然，如“spend more time on my healthy body”应改为“focus more on my health”。时态应保持一致。

示例: Without the Internet, I would focus more on my health and school assignments. I would spend more time exercising and improving myself.

× I always used the computer to play the games and chat with my friends.

✓ I always used the computer to play games and chat with my friends.

play后面不需要加定冠词the，因为这里指的是一般的游戏活动，而不是特定的游戏。

× Sometimes I need to text my families and my friends.

✓ Sometimes I need to text my family and my friends.

family是不可数名词，表示家庭成员的整体，不用复数形式families。

× Sometimes I just need to finish my school assignment by the the Internet.

✓ Sometimes I just need to finish my school assignment by the Internet.

the Internet前面重复了the，应该去掉多余的the。

× My parents thought it's would be harmful to my study so they banned me from using it.

✓ My parents thought it would be harmful to my study so they banned me from using it.

it和would之间不需要加缩写形式的is，应该直接用it would。

× Yes, I think I spent too much time online.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online.

根据上下文，学生现在仍然花很多时间上网，应该用现在时spend而不是过去时spent。

× Most of the time I just using the WeChat to text to my friends or go tiktok.

✓ Most of the time I just use WeChat to text my friends or go on TikTok.

这里需要用动词原形use而不是using；text后面不需要介词to；go TikTok前需要介词on。

× Without the Internet, I will spend more time on my healthy body and school assignment.

✓ Without the Internet, I will spend more time on my health and school assignments.

healthy body用法不当，应该用health表示健康；school assignment应为复数assignments。

× I spend more time on exercising and improving myself.

✓ I will spend more time exercising and improving myself.

根据上下文，这句话表达的是将来会做的事情，应该用将来时will spend；动词后面用动名词形式exercising和improving。