网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct verb tenses and sentence structures to make your answer clearer and more natural. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

示例: I started using the internet when I was in grade 9, which was around 14 years old. I think that was quite young to start using it.

建议: Use proper grammar and sentence structure. Also, add linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide a bit more detail.

示例: I don't usually spend much time on the internet; I only use it when I need to do my assignments.

建议: Try to organize your answer with clearer sentence structure and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about the restrictions.

示例: Yes, when I was in high school, my parents limited my internet use so I could focus on studying for university. I was only allowed to use the internet before 9:00 PM.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples.

示例: Not really. I mainly use the internet for assignments during the week, and on weekends, I spend most of my time on social media platforms like Facebook and Instagram.

建议: Focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words and be specific about your activities.

示例: Honestly, if I didn't have the internet, I would play sports or listen to music to make good use of my free time, which is also beneficial for my health.

× So honestly I start using the Internet since I on grade 9 which I was around as I remember is around 14 years old and it's just quite little for that age.

✓ So honestly I started using the Internet since I was in grade 9, which I remember was around 14 years old, and it was just quite little for that age.

The verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the past time reference 'since I was in grade 9'. Also, 'I on grade 9' is incorrect; it should be 'I was in grade 9' to correctly use the past tense and preposition. The sentence needed past tense consistency to correctly express a past event.

× I'm not usually spend much time on the Internet, I'm just only use it for my assignments when I need it.

✓ I don't usually spend much time on the Internet; I only use it for my assignments when I need to.

The phrase 'I'm not usually spend' is incorrect because 'usually' requires the base form of the verb with 'do/does' for present simple tense. The correct form is 'I don't usually spend'. Also, 'I'm just only use it' should be 'I only use it' to maintain correct subject-verb agreement and tense.

× I should say when I was in high school which I have to spend time for my study to go to the university.

✓ I should say when I was in high school, I had to spend time studying to get into university.

The phrase 'I have to spend time' is present tense but the context is past, so it should be 'I had to spend time'. Also, 'for my study to go to the university' is awkward; 'studying to get into university' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So at the time my parents didn't allow me to spend not much time on the Internet and I can only use it before 9:00 PM.

✓ So at that time, my parents didn't allow me to spend much time on the Internet, and I could only use it before 9:00 PM.

The phrase 'didn't allow me to spend not much time' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't allow me to spend much time'. Also, 'I can only use it' should be in past modal 'I could only use it' to match the past context.

× Not really since I only use Internet for my assignment and I think I mostly I use Internet on the weekends which is which I have most of the time on the social media like fables or Instagram.

✓ Not really, since I only use the Internet for my assignments, and I think I mostly use the Internet on the weekends, where I spend most of the time on social media like Facebook or Instagram.

'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Assignment' should be plural 'assignments' to match general usage. 'Fables' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'Facebook'. The sentence structure was also corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Honestly I've I think I I should say that I play some sport or listening to music to not wasting time on the free time which is which spring spot is good for my health.

✓ Honestly, I think I should say that I played some sports or listened to music to avoid wasting time during my free time, which is good for my health.

The sentence mixes tenses and has redundant words. 'I've I think I I should say' is confusing; simplified to 'I think I should say'. 'Play' and 'listening' should be past tense 'played' and 'listened' to match the past context. 'To not wasting' is incorrect; it should be 'to avoid wasting'. 'Spring spot' is a mishearing of 'playing sports' or 'sports'. The sentence was corrected for tense consistency and clarity.