网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中时态使用不一致，且表达不够自然。建议注意时态一致性，并简洁表达。

示例: I started using the Internet when I was a child, around the time it was rapidly developing in my country. At first, I mainly used it to play online games, which helped me improve my gaming skills and connect with others.

建议: 回答较为完整，但缺少连接词使句子衔接不够流畅。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯。

示例: Currently, I can only go online when my mother allows me, usually for a short time. When I'm online, I often play various online games because they help me relax and have fun.

建议: 回答内容清晰，但有语法错误，如“had to completed”应为“had to complete”。建议注意语法准确性。

示例: I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because I hadn't finished my homework. Although I really wanted to play online games, I knew I had to complete my assignments first.

建议: 表达不自然且有语法错误，如“get observed”用词不当。建议使用更自然的表达并注意语法。

示例: Yes, I do spend quite a lot of time online, especially during my university years. I often get absorbed in online games and watch videos on social media, which helps me relax after studying.

建议: 回答中有重复和表达不清的问题，且用词不准确。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用正确表达。

示例: If I didn't have the Internet, I think I would try to learn new skills. For example, I might join a discussion group or try mountain climbing, which I have never done before.

× At first I mainly use it to play online games, which helps me learn more about game skills and contact with other.

✓ At first I mainly used it to play online games, which helped me learn more about game skills and contact with others.

句子描述的是过去的情况，动词时态应使用过去式。'use'和'helps'应改为'used'和'helped'。此外，'contact with other'中的'other'应为复数形式'others'。

× At first I mainly use it to play online games, which helps me learn more about game skills and contact with other.

✓ At first I mainly used it to play online games, which helped me learn more about game skills and contact with others.

'other'在此处应为复数形式'others'，表示与其他人联系。

× At this time, I can only go online when my mother allows me to, usually for a short time.

✓ At that time, I could only go online when my mother allowed me to, usually for a short time.

句子描述过去的情况，动词时态应使用过去时，'can'改为'could'，'allows'改为'allowed'。

× I remember one time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because I hadn't finished my homework.

✓ I remember one time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because I hadn't finished my homework.

该句时态正确，无需修改。

× I really wanted to play online games, but I knew I had to completed my assignments first.

✓ I really wanted to play online games, but I knew I had to complete my assignments first.

'had to'后应接动词原形，'completed'应改为'complete'。

× I often get observed in online games and watching videos on social media, which make me feel relaxed after studying.

✓ I often get absorbed in online games and watching videos on social media, which make me feel relaxed after studying.

'get observed'用法错误，应为'get absorbed'表示沉浸于某事。

× I often get observed in online games and watching videos on social media, which make me feel relaxed after studying.

✓ I often get absorbed in online games and watching videos on social media, which makes me feel relaxed after studying.

'which'指代前面的复数内容，谓语动词应为复数形式'make'改为'makes'。

× If I didn't have Internet, I think I would try to learn new skills.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I think I would try to learn new skills.

Internet前应加定冠词'the'，表示特指互联网。

× For example, I might go on discussion and trade mountain climbing because I never I never tried it before.

✓ For example, I might join discussions and try mountain climbing because I have never tried it before.

'go on discussion'用法错误，应为'join discussions'；'trade mountain climbing'应为'try mountain climbing'。此外，'I never I never'重复，应删除一个。