网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Gereksiz tekrarları azaltarak ve cümlelerinizi daha net kurarak daha etkili olabilirsiniz. Ayrıca, cevaplarınızı doğrudan soruya yanıt verecek şekilde yapılandırmalısınız.

示例: I started using the internet about five years ago when my father set up Wi-Fi at home. Since then, I've been able to connect easily and use it regularly.

建议: Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve doğal hale getirmek için gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlelerinizi daha mantıklı ve tutarlı yapabilirsiniz.

示例: I go online very often, usually about eight hours a day. I enjoy scrolling through TikTok and Instagram, so I have become quite used to spending a lot of time on my phone.

建议: Cevabınızı daha net ve anlaşılır yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, daha spesifik detaylar vererek cevabınızı zenginleştirebilirsiniz.

示例: Yes, a few months ago, the government temporarily cut off the internet due to some political issues. During that time, we couldn't access any online services.

建议: Cümlelerinizi daha açık ve akıcı hale getirmek için dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalı ve daha net ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, nedenlerinizi ve düşüncelerinizi daha spesifik şekilde açıklamalısınız.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I enjoy using my phone during my free time. It has become my main leisure activity, although sometimes I feel tired of it.

建议: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve etkili yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, internet olmadan yapacağınız aktiviteler hakkında daha spesifik bilgiler vermelisiniz.

示例: Without the internet, I think I would find it difficult to do many things because I have been using it since childhood. However, I might spend more time reading books or meeting friends in person.

× it was like a five years ago

✓ it was like five years ago

The article 'a' should not be used before plural nouns like 'years'. The correct form is 'five years ago' without 'a'.

× I've just started using the Internet

✓ I just started using the Internet

The present perfect tense 'I've just started' is not appropriate with a specific past time reference 'five years ago'. Simple past tense 'I just started' should be used.

× my father, uh, was handle it that time

✓ my father, uh, was handling it at that time

The verb 'handle' should be in the present participle form 'handling' after 'was' to form the past continuous tense. Also, 'at that time' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× we just connect at home Wi-Fi

✓ we just connected to home Wi-Fi

The verb should be in past tense 'connected' and the correct preposition with 'Wi-Fi' is 'to', not 'at'.

× we just have just reached the Internet that quickly and that time I started

✓ we just reached the Internet that quickly and at that time I started

The present perfect 'have just reached' is incorrect with a past time reference. Simple past 'reached' is correct. Also, 'at that time' is the correct phrase.

× It to be honest, uh, I'm doing this frequently uh, I'm using my phone like 8 hours in each day

✓ To be honest, I do this frequently. I use my phone about 8 hours each day

The phrase 'It to be honest' is incorrect; 'To be honest' is the correct expression. Also, 'I'm doing this frequently' should be simple present 'I do this frequently' for habitual actions. 'Like 8 hours in each day' should be 'about 8 hours each day'.

× I'm just doing this like constantly uh, moreover, uh, I'm just, I really enjoy when I'm scrolling on TikTok or Instagram

✓ I'm just doing this constantly. Moreover, I really enjoy scrolling on TikTok or Instagram

The phrase 'doing this like constantly' is awkward; 'constantly' alone suffices. 'I really enjoy when I'm scrolling' should be 'I really enjoy scrolling' without 'when'.

× I just got used to my phone

✓ I just got used to my phone

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Actually, there was a time that the Internet was cut off

✓ Actually, there was a time when the Internet was cut off

The relative pronoun 'that' should be 'when' to refer to a time.

× the government maybe just cut off because there are some issues about the government

✓ the government maybe just cut it off because there were some issues with the government

The modal verb 'maybe' should be 'may have' or 'might have' for past possibility. Also, 'cut off' needs an object 'it'. 'There are' should be past tense 'there were' to match past time. 'Issues about the government' should be 'issues with the government'.

× I can't remember like clearly, but uh, it was like a couple months ago, uh, the line, uh, we didn't reach the Internet

✓ I can't remember clearly, but it was like a couple of months ago when the line was down and we couldn't access the Internet

'Like clearly' is incorrect; 'clearly' alone is correct. 'A couple months' should be 'a couple of months'. 'We didn't reach the Internet' is incorrect; 'we couldn't access the Internet' is correct.

× Yes, it to be honest, I'm sick of everything and just one second

✓ Yes, to be honest, I'm sick of everything in just one second

'It to be honest' is incorrect; 'to be honest' is the correct phrase. The sentence is unclear; 'in just one second' clarifies the meaning.

× So in my free time, uh, I'm just prefer to use my telephone actually

✓ So in my free time, I just prefer to use my telephone actually

The verb 'prefer' should not be preceded by 'am' ('I'm'); it should be simple present 'I prefer'.

× I'm spend too much time on online because, uh, I don't know, it's my leisure activity

✓ I spend too much time online because, I don't know, it's my leisure activity

'I'm spend' is incorrect; the correct form is simple present 'I spend'. Also, 'on online' should be 'online' without 'on'.

× Internet, uh, is my like best friends, my closest friend actually

✓ Internet is like my best friend, my closest friend actually

'Best friends' is plural but refers to 'Internet' which is singular; it should be 'best friend'.

× I'm really addictive person to the Internet because I'm using the Internet, uh, since like my childhood

✓ I'm really an addicted person to the Internet because I've been using the Internet since my childhood

'Addictive' is an adjective meaning causing addiction; the correct adjective for a person is 'addicted'. Also, 'I'm using' with 'since' should be present perfect continuous 'I've been using'.

× so I can't stay one second without

✓ so I can't stay even one second without it

The sentence is incomplete and missing the object 'it'. Also, 'even' adds emphasis.