网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并补充具体细节，避免重复和语法错误。

示例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. At that time, I created a QQ account and often chatted with my friends online.

建议: 回答中有较多语气词和重复，表达不够流畅。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，并具体说明上网的频率和原因。

示例: I go online every day because I enjoy using different software. It helps me connect with others and learn new things about the world.

建议: 回答语法错误明显，表达不清晰。建议用简单句子直接说明原因和情况，避免口语化错误。

示例: Yes, when I failed an exam or did not finish my homework, my mother would not allow me to use the internet or play on the computer.

建议: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子不够连贯。建议明确表达观点，使用连词连接句子，并具体说明原因。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I study through online courses. There are many design classes on platforms like YouTube and Bilibili.

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达有误。建议直接回答问题，说明没有网络时的替代活动，并用连词使句子更流畅。

示例: Without the internet, I would read newspapers or watch TV to get news. I also enjoy listening to K-pop music and looking at photos of my favorite idols.

× I used the Internet when I started the study at primary school Is my first time to use the Internet.

✓ I used the Internet when I started studying at primary school. It was my first time using the Internet.

句中“started the study”应改为“started studying”，因为“start”后接动名词表示开始做某事；“Is my first time to use the Internet”语法错误，应改为“It was my first time using the Internet”，使用过去时态和动名词形式。

× I often chat with each other in the Internet.

✓ I often chat with others on the Internet.

“chat with each other”用法错误，应该用“chat with others”表示与别人聊天；“in the Internet”应改为“on the Internet”，介词用法错误。

× I'm a big fan at, uh, software on the Internet

✓ I'm a big fan of software on the Internet

“fan”后面应接介词“of”表示喜欢某物，“at”用法错误。

× I think, uh, it's a good way for me to connect with each other

✓ I think, uh, it's a good way for me to connect with others

“connect with each other”错误，应该用“connect with others”表示与别人连接。

× have new approach to this world.

✓ have a new approach to this world.

“new approach”前缺少冠词“a”，冠词使用错误。

× when I got fell in the exam or just did bad in the housework

✓ when I failed the exam or did badly in the housework

“got fell”错误，应使用“failed”表示考试不及格；“did bad”应改为“did badly”，副词修饰动词。

× my momma often taught me don't use the Internet on or play the computer.

✓ my mom often told me not to use the Internet or play on the computer.

“taught me don't use”语法错误，应为“told me not to use”；“play the computer”应为“play on the computer”；“momma”口语化，改为“mom”。

× I have to spend the too much time online

✓ I have to spend too much time online

“the too much”用法错误，应该去掉“the”，直接用“too much”。

× there has so many designing courses in the, uh, computer

✓ there are so many design courses on the computer

“there has”应改为“there are”表示复数；“designing courses”应为“design courses”；“in the computer”应为“on the computer”。

× I just see the photographers about this idol.

✓ I just see the photos of this idol.

“photographers”指摄影师，语境应为“photos”（照片）；“about this idol”应改为“of this idol”，介词用法错误。