网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，表达不自然。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，使表达更流畅。

示例: I started using the internet at a very early age. For example, when I was six, I got my first smartphone and downloaded social media apps like Instagram to keep in touch with my friends.

建议: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，缺少连贯性。建议直接回答问题，使用完整句子，并用连接词说明原因或细节。

示例: I usually go online for at least five hours a day, mainly using social media apps like Instagram and WeChat. However, I realize that this sometimes wastes a lot of my time.

建议: 回答含糊且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，使用正确的语法和连词，使内容更具体。

示例: As a student, we are not allowed to use the internet during school hours. However, once in a Chinese lesson, the teacher allowed us to use our phones to complete a questionnaire.

建议: 回答断断续续，语法和表达不准确。建议用完整句子表达观点，并用连接词说明原因和影响。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, my friends often see me online on Instagram, which wastes a lot of my time and disrupts my plans for studying and doing homework.

建议: 表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议简洁明了地回答问题，使用连词连接细节，使表达更自然。

示例: Without the internet, I would study or do my homework. Besides, I might read some comedy books from my bookshelf because sometimes using my phone or laptop can be boring.

× In contemporary era.

✓ In the contemporary era.

缺少冠词'the'，应使用定冠词修饰特指的时代。

× I would like to say that children like me.

✓ I would like to say that children like me have used the internet at a very early age.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，导致表达不清晰。

× Have I've used? Internet at a very early age.

✓ I have used the internet at a very early age.

疑问句结构错误，应改为陈述句表达事实。

× I downloaded many social media.

✓ I downloaded many social media apps.

“social media”是不可数名词，需加具体名词“apps”表示多个应用。

× Such as Instagram to contact with my friends and to stay a close relationship with them.

✓ Such as Instagram to contact my friends and to maintain a close relationship with them.

动词contact后不加介词with；stay a close relationship表达不当，应使用maintain。

× To be honest, according to my one of my apps.

✓ To be honest, according to one of my apps,

短语顺序错误，应为“according to one of my apps”。

× In my phone, about at least five hours I spent on social media applications such as Instagram and WeChat.

✓ On my phone, I spend at least about five hours on social media applications such as Instagram and WeChat.

介词应为on my phone；时态应为一般现在时描述习惯行为；词序调整使句子通顺。

× Which? Actually, you waste lots of my time.

✓ Actually, it wastes a lot of my time.

疑问句“Which?”无意义，应改为陈述句；主语应为it指代前文内容；动词需第三人称单数形式。

× And for example, I have spent for.

✓ For example, I have spent time on it.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，导致表达不清楚。

× Well, as a student, we are not allowed to use or use internet during school times, but.

✓ Well, as students, we are not allowed to use the internet during school time, but

主语单复数不一致；“internet”前需加定冠词the；“school times”应为不可数名词“school time”。

× However, there's a month's time in Chinese lesson which imps me the most?

✓ However, there is a time during Chinese lessons which impresses me the most.

“month's time”表达不自然；“imps”拼写错误，应为“impresses”；句末问号不合适。

× Because the Chinese teacher allows it us to use phone to fill a questionnaire.

✓ Because the Chinese teacher allows us to use phones to fill out a questionnaire.

“it us”错误，应为“us”；“phone”应为复数“phones”；“fill a questionnaire”应为“fill out a questionnaire”。

× And my friends take photos of the whole.

✓ And my friends took photos of the whole process.

时态应为过去时；句子不完整，缺少宾语。

× Yes, obviously. Like my, for example, my friends can always see, me is online in Instagram and that actually wasted.

✓ Yes, obviously. For example, my friends can always see that I am online on Instagram, and that actually wastes a lot of time.

句子结构混乱，主谓不一致；“me is”错误，应为“I am”；时态应为一般现在时；“wasted”应为“wastes”。

× And. It disturbed my. Plan for doing my homework or studying.

✓ And it disturbs my plans for doing my homework or studying.

时态应为一般现在时；“plan”应为复数“plans”；“for doing”表达正确。

× And like, I will be studying or doing homework.

✓ I will be studying or doing homework.

句首“And like”多余，应去除。

× But besides, sometimes I will look at, I with my, with some of the books on my bookshelf.

✓ Besides, sometimes I will look at some of the books on my bookshelf.

句子结构混乱，介词使用错误，需简化表达。

× Most of them are some comedy because it's boring to with my phone or laptop.

✓ Most of them are comedies because it's boring to use my phone or laptop.

“some comedy”应为复数“comedies”；“boring to with”表达错误，应为“boring to use”。