网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中语法错误较多，句子结构不够自然，且表达不够简洁。建议注意时态和句子顺序，避免重复表达。

示例: I started using the internet when I was six years old. The first time was during a computer class where my teacher taught me how to use the internet to contact my friends. It is a very unforgettable memory for me.

建议: 回答中时态混乱，句子不够连贯，且有语法错误。建议使用正确的时态和连接词，使表达更流畅。

示例: When I was in high school, I often went online about two or three times a week because I didn't have a smartphone or laptop. Now, I have my own smartphone, so I can go online every day.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，且表达不够清晰。建议注意主谓一致和代词使用，增强表达的准确性。

示例: Yes, I remember about five years ago when I was a high school student. My mother limited my time playing computer games and chatting online because she thought the internet could affect my academic performance.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁。建议避免重复，使用更准确的表达方式。

示例: I don't think I spend too much time online. I usually spend about two or three hours per day, which is less than some of my friends who spend over eight hours daily, which I think is too long.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，句子结构不够自然。建议注意冠词和动词形式，使表达更地道。

示例: Without the internet, I would prefer going out and doing outdoor activities like riding a motorcycle to the countryside to explore the world, or just staying at home to listen to some music. These are all good ways to relax.

× When was the six years old I started to use the Internet?

✓ When I was six years old, I started to use the Internet.

句子中时间状语的位置错误，应该是“当我六岁的时候”，需要将“was”放在“I”之后，形成正确的时间状语从句。

× My teacher taught me how to use the Internet to contact with my friend.

✓ My teacher taught me how to use the Internet to contact my friend.

动词“contact”后面不需要介词“with”，直接加宾语即可。

× I often go online about two or three times a week, because at that time I not have smartphones or laptop.

✓ I often went online about two or three times a week, because at that time I did not have a smartphone or a laptop.

时态应为过去时，且“smartphone”和“laptop”应使用单数形式并加冠词“a”。

× Now I have my own smartphone so I can online everyday.

✓ Now I have my own smartphone so I can go online every day.

“go online”是固定搭配，缺少动词“go”，且“everyday”应分开为“every day”。

× It happened about five years ago. At that time, I was high school student.

✓ It happened about five years ago. At that time, I was a high school student.

“high school student”前需要冠词“a”。

× My mother limited me to play the computer game or online to chat with my friend because he thinks the Internet can affect my academic performance.

✓ My mother limited me from playing computer games or going online to chat with my friends because she thinks the Internet can affect my academic performance.

“limited me to play”应改为“limited me from playing”，且“computer game”应为复数“computer games”，“online to chat”应改为“going online to chat”，“my friend”应为复数“my friends”，代词“he”应为“she”指代母亲。

× I don't think so. Now I just spend time about two or three hours per day to spend time on Internet.

✓ I don't think so. Now I just spend about two or three hours per day on the Internet.

“spend time about”表达不自然，应为“spend about...hours”，且“spend time on Internet”中“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，且避免重复“spend time”。

× I think it time is short compared with another friend.

✓ I think the time is short compared with other friends.

“it time”应为“the time”，“another friend”应为复数“other friends”以表示比较对象。

× They always spend over 8 hours per day to spend on the Internet.

✓ They always spend over 8 hours per day on the Internet.

“spend ... to spend”重复，应去掉第二个“spend”。

× All of these are good way of amusement.

✓ All of these are good ways of amusement.

“way”应为复数“ways”，因为前面指代多个活动。