网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng hơn về thời điểm bắt đầu sử dụng internet và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'learn five grade'.

示例: I started using the internet when I was in the fifth grade.

建议: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời có tính liên kết. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp thông tin cụ thể về tần suất sử dụng internet.

示例: I usually go online three times a week because I have to study and attend school. Sometimes, I read books, so I don't go online every day.

建议: Bạn cần trả lời đầy đủ và rõ ràng hơn, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp từ. Hãy giải thích thêm về lý do không được sử dụng internet.

示例: Yes, I wasn't allowed to use the internet during my important exam periods to avoid distractions.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn cho câu hỏi hiện tại và sắp xếp câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy dùng liên từ để nối các ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: Yes, I spend too much time online because I need to study, do homework, chat with my friends, watch films, and relax.

建议: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy thêm một câu giải thích hoặc cảm nhận để câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

示例: Without the internet, I would play sports such as badminton, tennis, golf, and basketball to stay active and entertained.

× When I learn five grade, I start use the Internet.

✓ When I was in fifth grade, I started using the Internet.

The sentence requires past tense to describe a past event. 'Learn' should be 'was in' to indicate the grade level, 'start' should be 'started' to match past tense, and 'use' should be 'using' to correctly follow 'started'.

× When I learn five grade, I start use the Internet.

✓ When I was in fifth grade, I started using the Internet.

After the verb 'started', the verb should be in the '-ing' form ('using') to be grammatically correct.

× I go online try a week because I I must do study and go to school sometime I I can read a book so I can't go online.

✓ I go online twice a week because I must study and go to school. Sometimes I can read a book, so I can't go online.

The phrase 'try a week' is incorrect; it should be 'twice a week' (quantifier correction). 'Do study' is incorrect; 'must study' is correct. The sentence is long and run-on; it needs to be split for clarity. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'.

× I go online try a week because I I must do study and go to school sometime I I can read a book so I can't go online.

✓ I go online twice a week because I must study and go to school. Sometimes I can read a book, so I can't go online.

The quantifier 'try a week' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'twice a week' to indicate frequency.

× I go online try a week because I I must do study and go to school sometime I I can read a book so I can't go online.

✓ I go online twice a week because I must study and go to school. Sometimes I can read a book, so I can't go online.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with repeated words and lacks proper punctuation. It should be divided into clearer sentences for better understanding.

× When I umm I have exam important exam period.

✓ When I had an important exam period.

The sentence refers to a past event, so 'have' should be changed to past tense 'had'. Also, 'exam important exam period' is redundant and should be 'an important exam period'.

× I spent too much time online because I must still study and do homework and chat with my friend, watch film and relax activities.

✓ I spend too much time online because I must still study, do homework, chat with my friends, watch films, and do relaxing activities.

The question is about current habits, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate instead of past tense 'spent'. Also, plural forms 'friends' and 'films' are needed. 'Relax activities' should be 'relaxing activities'.

× I spent too much time online because I must still study and do homework and chat with my friend, watch film and relax activities.

✓ I spend too much time online because I must still study, do homework, chat with my friends, watch films, and do relaxing activities.

The singular 'friend' and 'film' should be plural 'friends' and 'films' to match the context of multiple activities.

× I spent too much time online because I must still study and do homework and chat with my friend, watch film and relax activities.

✓ I spend too much time online because I must still study, do homework, chat with my friends, watch films, and do relaxing activities.

The phrase 'relax activities' is incorrect; it should be 'relaxing activities' using the '-ing' form to describe the type of activities.

× Oh, thanks for question. I I play sport, for example badminton, tennis, golf and basketball.

✓ Oh, thanks for the question. I play sports, for example badminton, tennis, golf, and basketball.

The phrase 'thanks for question' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Sport' should be plural 'sports' when referring to multiple types. Also, commas are needed in the list for clarity.