网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不自然。建议你直接回答问题，并用更准确的表达方式，比如说“我六岁开始使用互联网，主要是玩电脑游戏和使用社交媒体”。同时避免冗余，保持句子简洁。

示例: I started using the internet when I was six years old. At that time, I mainly played computer games and used social media.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议你用清晰的句子表达频率，并说明原因，比如“我每天都会上网，因为我喜欢浏览社交媒体和看短视频，尤其是抖音”。

示例: I go online every day because I enjoy browsing social media and watching short videos, especially on TikTok.

建议: 回答中语法和表达不清晰。建议你用更准确的句子表达，比如“我记得小学时因为我有点沉迷网络，父母限制我长时间使用电脑”。同时注意句子结构和连贯性。

示例: Yes, when I was in primary school, I was a bit obsessed with social media, so my parents limited my computer use for a long time.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然。建议你用更准确的时态和表达，比如“我认为我花太多时间上网，经常整天看抖音短视频，导致学习和工作时注意力不集中”。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I often watch short videos on TikTok all day, which makes me lose energy and focus on important things like studying and work.

建议: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法有误。建议你用正确的时态和连贯的句子，比如“如果没有互联网，我可能会整天睡觉和读书，但主要是睡觉来打发无聊的时间”。

示例: If there were no internet, I would probably sleep all day and read some books, but mostly I would sleep to pass the boring time.

× Well, it's a long time ago, I was six years old.

✓ Well, it was a long time ago, I was six years old.

The phrase 'it's a long time ago' incorrectly uses the present tense 'it's' (it is) when referring to a past event. The correct past tense form is 'it was'. This aligns the tense with the time reference 'a long time ago'.

× I started to play computer and use social media on Internet.

✓ I started to play computer games and use social media on the Internet.

The phrase 'play computer' is incomplete; it should be 'play computer games'. Also, 'on Internet' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'Internet'. The correct phrase is 'on the Internet'.

× Every time, every day, every time, every minute because I I like to score on social media and enjoying some short videos, especially on Tiktok.

✓ Every day, every minute, because I like to scroll on social media and enjoy some short videos, especially on TikTok.

The phrase 'every time' is repeated unnecessarily and misplaced. 'Score' is likely a misuse of 'scroll'. Also, 'enjoying' should be 'enjoy' to match the verb form after 'like to'. 'TikTok' should be capitalized properly.

× Yes, what I was in primary school IA little obsessed with social online, so my parents started to prevent me away from playing computer for a long time.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school, I was a little obsessed with social media online, so my parents started to prevent me from playing computer games for a long time.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'what' should be 'when'; 'IA' is a typo for 'I was'; 'social online' should be 'social media online'; 'prevent me away from' is incorrect, the correct phrase is 'prevent me from'; 'playing computer' should be 'playing computer games'.

× Yes, I think I spend too much time online like I always watching short videos on Tiktok for a long day and I have no extra energy and concentration on my big event like study and you know, some work.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I am always watching short videos on TikTok for a long time, and I have no extra energy or concentration on important things like studying and work.

The phrase 'I always watching' is incorrect; it should be 'I am always watching' to indicate continuous action. 'For a long day' is awkward; 'for a long time' is better. 'Big event like study' is unclear; 'important things like studying' is clearer. Also, 'and you know, some work' is informal and should be rephrased.

× I think maybe I would choose to sleep all day and reading some books, but mainly just sleep to spend this boring time without Internet.

✓ I think maybe I would choose to sleep all day and read some books, but mainly just sleep to pass this boring time without the Internet.

After 'choose to', the verb should be in base form 'read', not 'reading'. Also, 'spend this boring time' is better expressed as 'pass this boring time'. 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the' before it.