网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and lacks proper sentence structure. Try to give a clear and direct response with simple sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I started using the internet when I was a child. At that time, I used Yahoo Messenger to communicate with my elder sister who lived far away. It helped me stay connected with my family and also explore cartoons and articles online.

建议: Your answer is too long and confusing. Try to answer directly and use linking words to organize your ideas. Keep your sentences clear and concise.

示例: I go online every day, usually after school. First, I have lunch and rest for a while. Then, I use the desktop computer to browse the internet and do my homework.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Use correct verb tenses and provide more specific details with linking words.

示例: Yes, I remember when I was between 12 and 17 years old, my mother did not allow me to use the internet. She wanted me to focus on my studies during that time, so she kept me away from online activities.

建议: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I often use the internet to communicate with my family and do my homework. Also, I spend time in chat rooms using Yahoo Messenger to stay connected with friends.

建议: Your answer is relevant but needs clearer sentence structure and linking words. Try to organize your ideas logically and use simple sentences to express your thoughts.

示例: Without the internet, I would do my homework by hand and read books. I would also watch television, help my mother with cooking and washing clothes, and spend time with my family.

× I start using Internet while when I was trying I was looking some difference of article cartoons and connected to my family on that time by for example like there was an app by name of Yahoo ID so I was mostly using there to communicate with my elder sister which was living in.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was trying to look at some different articles and cartoons and connect with my family. At that time, for example, there was an app called Yahoo ID, so I mostly used it to communicate with my elder sister who was living there.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'start' instead of past tense 'started' to describe a past event. Also, 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs to be clarified for better understanding.

× I do open online regular like everyday but after school when I was coming back from school at 2:00 then I was taking my lunch then was resting As for two hours then was waking up at 5:00 and having my tea and also using the desktop with the chair and table so.

✓ I go online regularly, like every day, but after school when I came back at 2:00, I had my lunch, then rested for two hours. Then I woke up at 5:00, had my tea, and used the desktop with the chair and table.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I do open online regular' should be 'I go online regularly' to express habitual action. Past events should be in past tense, e.g., 'was coming' to 'came', 'was taking' to 'had', 'was resting' to 'rested', 'was waking up' to 'woke up'.

× Yes, I remember a time when I weren't, uh, allowed to use the Internet. It was by the age of uh, from 12 to 17 and I was studying in that time in class 4:00 to 5:00. So my mom were not allowing me to use the Internet and she was keeping me away and.

✓ Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet. It was from the age of 12 to 17, and I was studying in classes 4 to 5. So my mom did not allow me to use the Internet and kept me away.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement errors: 'I weren't' should be 'I wasn't' because 'I' takes singular verb. 'My mom were' should be 'my mom was' or better 'did not allow' to match singular subject. Also, 'class 4:00 to 5:00' is unclear and corrected to 'classes 4 to 5'.

× Yes I think I spent too much time online. I was regularly getting online and communicate with my family by that time also was doing my part time homework from off schooling on Internet and using a lot of chat rooms and Yahoo ID for communications and as well are looking for the same.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I regularly get online and communicate with my family. At that time, I also did my part-time homework outside of school on the Internet and used a lot of chat rooms and Yahoo ID for communication and similar activities.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Since the question is about current habits, present tense 'spend', 'get', 'communicate' is appropriate. 'Was regularly getting' and 'was doing' are past continuous and do not fit here. Also, 'are looking' should be 'look' or 'used' depending on context. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and tense consistency.

× I I would do without Internet is like writing homework of school, working on articles with my hand work also part time watching television, having tea sometime. I used to cook for guests and and for my own family and helping my mother and also washing clothes.

✓ Without the Internet, I would do things like writing school homework, working on articles by hand, watching television part-time, and having tea sometimes. I used to cook for guests and my own family, help my mother, and also wash clothes.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'I would do without Internet is like...' is incorrect. It is corrected to a clear conditional sentence. Also, repeated words like 'and and' are removed. The sentence is reorganized for clarity and grammatical correctness.