网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and make it more concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'at that time' and 'since then', you can use 'initially' and 'nowadays'.

示例: I started using the Internet when I was around 12 years old. Initially, it was mainly for school research and playing simple online games. Nowadays, it has become an essential part of my daily life for learning and communication.

建议: Your answer is good but contains some grammatical errors and lacks linking words. Use linking words like 'such as' or 'for instance' to introduce examples, and correct verb forms for better clarity.

示例: I go online several times a day, mainly for work and socializing. For instance, I use the Internet to check emails, browse news, and stay connected with friends through social media. Therefore, it has become an essential part of my daily routine.

建议: Your answer has some confusion and incomplete sentences. Please clarify your ideas and complete your sentences. Also, avoid irrelevant details like '6 screen time' which is unclear. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I remember a time during my childhood when my parents restricted my Internet use. They believed that excessive screen time could distract me from my studies. Therefore, they only allowed me to go online for educational purposes and limited my usage.

建议: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and some awkward phrasing. Avoid repeating phrases like 'Yes I do' twice. Use linking words like 'however' properly to contrast ideas and improve fluency.

示例: Yes, I think I spend quite a lot of time online, especially for entertainment and social media. For example, I often find myself scrolling through videos or chatting with friends longer than I planned. However, I try to balance this by setting specific times for online activities.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'really more on' and 'face to face intersections and departments'. Please use correct expressions and clarify your ideas. Use linking words to connect contrasting ideas.

示例: Without the Internet, I would rely more on traditional methods of communication and information gathering, such as reading books, newspapers, or speaking directly with people. Although this would slow down the pace of accessing information and connecting with others, it might also encourage more face-to-face interactions.

× I use the Internet to check emails, browsing news, and stay connected with friends through social media.

✓ I use the Internet to check emails, browse news, and stay connected with friends through social media.

After 'to' (infinitive marker), the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Here, 'browsing' should be corrected to 'browse' to maintain parallel structure with 'check' and 'stay'.

× My parents were quite strict about 6 screen time and believe that excessive Internet use could distract me from my studies.

✓ My parents were quite strict about screen time and believed that excessive Internet use could distract me from my studies.

The phrase '6 screen time' is unclear and likely a typo; it should be 'screen time'. Also, since the sentence refers to past events, 'believe' should be in past tense 'believed' to maintain tense consistency.

× For example, they only permitted me to go online for educational purposes and limited.

✓ For example, they only permitted me to go online for educational purposes and limited my usage time.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and limited' which is incomplete. It needs an object to complete the meaning, such as 'my usage time'.

× Yes I do. I yes, I do think I spend quite a lot of time online, especially for entertainment and social media.

✓ Yes, I do. I think I spend quite a lot of time online, especially for entertainment and social media.

The phrase 'I yes, I do think' is redundant and awkward. Removing the extra 'yes' improves clarity and sentence flow.

× I often might find myself scrolling through videos or chatting with friends longer than I intentionally planned.

✓ I often find myself scrolling through videos or chatting with friends longer than I intentionally planned.

Using both 'often' and 'might' together is redundant. 'Might' implies possibility, but 'often' indicates frequency. Removing 'might' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Without the Internet, I would really more on traditional methods of communication and information gatherings such as reading books, newspapers, or speaking directly with people.

✓ Without the Internet, I would really rely more on traditional methods of communication and information gathering such as reading books, newspapers, or speaking directly with people.

The verb 'rely' is missing after 'would really'. Also, 'gatherings' should be 'gathering' as it is used as a noun here.

× It would certainly slow down the pace of accessing information and connecting with others, but it might also encourage more face to face intersections and departments.

✓ It would certainly slow down the pace of accessing information and connecting with others, but it might also encourage more face-to-face interactions and discussions.

'Face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used as an adjective. 'Intersections and departments' are incorrect words here; the intended words are likely 'interactions and discussions'.