网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by avoiding repetition and making it more concise. Instead of repeating 'started using the Internet', you can combine the information into one sentence and add a linking phrase for coherence.

示例: I started using the Internet when I was about 14 years old, during my 9th standard studies, which was my first experience with it.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains hesitations and redundancy. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your online habits.

示例: I usually go online whenever I am free, mainly to scroll through social media or to find information that I need.

建议: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and slightly repetitive. Try to finish your sentences and avoid repeating similar phrases. Use linking words to explain the situation and your feelings clearly.

示例: Yes, during my MBA studies, we were not allowed to use the Internet or mobile phones inside the classroom as per the professors' strict rules, which I found quite challenging.

建议: Your answer shows your opinion but has repetition and is incomplete. Avoid repeating words and finish your thoughts. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide specific examples.

示例: I think I spend too much time online these days because social media platforms like Instagram often distract me from focusing on my work effectively.

建议: Your answer is somewhat contradictory and repetitive. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to present your opinion logically and provide a clear conclusion.

示例: Although the Internet has only been around for about two decades, I believe it is possible to live without it, but it would require some adjustment over time.

× I started using Internet when I was about 14 years of age.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was about 14 years of age.

The word 'Internet' is a unique noun and requires the definite article 'the' before it in English. Omitting 'the' before 'Internet' is incorrect.

× At that time I was studying 9th standard and that was the first time I started using the Internet.

✓ At that time I was studying in the 9th standard and that was the first time I started using the Internet.

When referring to school grades or standards, the definite article 'the' is used before the grade number. Also, the preposition 'in' is needed before 'the 9th standard' to indicate the level of study.

× I usually scroll across social media when I am free and when I am in in in a situation to use online and if I want to get any information from social media, I.

✓ I usually scroll through social media when I am free or when I want to get any information from social media.

The original sentence is repetitive and incomplete. 'Scroll across' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'scroll through'. Also, 'in in in a situation to use online' is redundant and unclear. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I was not allowed to use the Internet inside the classroom and it was a strict rule from the professors to not use mobile phone inside the classroom and I really felt.

✓ I was not allowed to use the Internet inside the classroom, and it was a strict rule from the professors not to use mobile phones inside the classroom, and I really felt that.

The sentence lacked proper punctuation and had awkward phrasing. 'Mobile phone' should be plural 'mobile phones' when referring generally. Also, 'to not use' is better phrased as 'not to use'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I think I am spending a lot of time scrolling online these days because because social media like Instagram really distracts us from being from doing our work without any distractions. And I think this.

✓ I think I am spending a lot of time scrolling online these days because social media like Instagram really distracts us from doing our work without any distractions.

The word 'because' was repeated unnecessarily. The phrase 'from being from doing' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'from doing'. The last sentence 'And I think this.' is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× It is impossible to live a life without Internet, but the Internet has been introduced only a few, only few only two decades ago.

✓ It is impossible to live a life without the Internet, but the Internet has been introduced only a few, only two decades ago.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'only few only two decades ago' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'only a few, only two decades ago' or simply 'only two decades ago'.

× And I think it is possible to live a life without Internet, but it takes some time.

✓ And I think it is possible to live a life without the Internet, but it takes some time.

Again, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The sentence is otherwise correct.