网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy thêm các chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: I started using the internet when I was about 12 years old. At first, I mainly used it for studying and chatting with my friends. Later, I also enjoyed watching live streams because they helped me learn new things.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến người nghe khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ tần suất sử dụng internet.

示例: I usually go online every day, especially after school. I use social media and watch videos during my free time, which makes me feel happy and relaxed.

建议: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và không liên quan đến câu hỏi. Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ ràng về một lần bạn không được phép dùng internet.

示例: Yes, I remember once when my father didn't allow me to use the internet because I needed to focus on my studies. It helped me concentrate better.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, sử dụng câu đơn giản và cung cấp số liệu cụ thể để minh họa.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially on social media. For example, during holidays, I can spend up to 19 hours a day using the internet.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ về từ vựng và ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sửa lỗi và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

示例: If I didn't have the internet, I would probably spend more time with my friends. For example, I might ride my bicycle around the neighborhood or play sports like football. I think it would be a great way to stay active and enjoy nature.

× I started using the Internet when I worked about 12 years old only for studies and studying in talk with my friend.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was about 12 years old, only for studies and talking with my friend.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'worked' instead of 'was' to indicate age in the past. The verb 'worked' is inappropriate here; the correct past tense of 'to be' is 'was' for singular subjects. Also, 'studying in talk' is incorrect; it should be 'talking'.

× I often use it wrong for post my photos and say my daily life knowledge.

✓ I often use it wrongly to post my photos and share my daily life experiences.

The adverb 'wrong' is incorrectly used; it should be 'wrongly' to modify the verb 'use'. Also, 'for post' should be 'to post', and 'say my daily life knowledge' is awkward; 'share my daily life experiences' is more natural.

× I also enjoy live stream 'cause it helped me.

✓ I also enjoy live streaming because it helps me.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund ('live streaming'). Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is better. 'Helped' is past tense but the context suggests present tense 'helps'.

× Usually you go online.

✓ Usually, I go online.

The sentence structure is incorrect; the subject 'you' does not match the speaker. It should be 'I' to answer the question about personal habits.

× I use social media when I don't have homework and in the free time it helps me help me can happiest and video shows after school.

✓ I use social media when I don't have homework and in my free time. It helps me feel happy and watch videos after school.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repeated phrases ('help me help me') and unclear expressions ('can happiest'). It needs to be split into two sentences and clarified.

× When I study last night, my father more than me.

✓ Last night when I was studying, my father was stricter with me.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a verb and proper structure. Adding 'was studying' and clarifying the father's action improves clarity.

× Are you phone calls? If I and mental health.

✓ He made phone calls to me because of my mental health.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. It needs a subject, verb, and object to be meaningful.

× Yes, I think I spend more time to more spend more time like I usually use when I free time and in holiday during holidays I just tend to 19 hours for social media.

✓ Yes, I think I spend a lot of time online. I usually use it during my free time and holidays, sometimes up to 19 hours on social media.

The original sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical. It needs simplification and correct tense usage.

× If I didn't have Internet, I would probably spend more time alone with my friends.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I would probably spend more time alone or with my friends.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the definite article 'the' before 'Internet'. Also, 'alone with my friends' is contradictory; it should be 'alone or with my friends'.

× For example, I might ride my bicycle, ride neighborhoods, or play sports like football.

✓ For example, I might ride my bicycle around the neighborhood or play sports like football.

The phrase 'ride neighborhoods' is incorrect; it should be 'ride around the neighborhood'.

× I think it would be a good way to stay Arctic and enjoy nature.

✓ I think it would be a good way to stay active and enjoy nature.

The word 'Arctic' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'active' to describe physical activity.