网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中时态使用不准确，应使用过去时；句子结构较为简单且有语法错误，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复。

示例: I started using the Internet when I was in secondary school because I took some IT courses. The first websites I visited were Google and Yahoo.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和单复数形式，并合理使用连接词。

示例: I go online every day, usually at night, to search for information on Google, catch up with the news, and keep in touch with my friends.

建议: 回答不连贯且含糊，语法错误明显，建议明确表达时间和原因，使用连词连接句子，使回答更完整。

示例: Yes, when I was preparing for an important exam at the certificate level, my father did not allow me to use the computer. It was hard for me because I couldn't access websites for information.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达观点，使用恰当的连接词，并避免重复词汇。

示例: I spend quite a lot of time online, but I don't think it's excessive because the Internet is essential for gaining knowledge and staying connected with others.

建议: 回答不完整且表达不清，建议完整回答问题，使用连贯的句子，并具体说明没有互联网时的影响。

示例: Without the Internet, it would be very inconvenient for me to get the latest news and information. I would have to ask people, but it would be difficult to verify the facts.

× I start using the Internet since I was in secondary school because I have some IT course during secondary school.

✓ I have been using the Internet since I was in secondary school because I had some IT courses during secondary school.

句子中使用了现在时态“start”，但表示从过去某时开始持续到现在的动作，应使用现在完成时“have been using”。另外，“course”应为复数形式“courses”，因为通常有多门课程。

× I have some IT course during secondary school.

✓ I had some IT courses during secondary school.

“course”应使用复数形式“courses”，因为通常指多门课程。

× The first page I think I contact is Google, Yahoo.

✓ The first pages I think I visited are Google and Yahoo.

“page”应为复数“pages”，因为提到了多个网站。

× I do all night every day for the Google searching for some informations and to catch up with the news and contact with my friends that is important in my daily life.

✓ I stay online all night every day to search on Google for some information, catch up with the news, and contact my friends, which is important in my daily life.

“do all night”表达不正确，应使用“stay online all night”。“informations”是不可数名词，应为“information”。“contact with my friends”中“with”多余，应直接用“contact my friends”。“that is important”应改为“which is important”，指代前面的行为。

× Yes, when I'm in cert level, I have to prepare the exam because it's quite important.

✓ Yes, when I was in cert level, I had to prepare for the exam because it was quite important.

描述过去的情况，应使用过去时态“was”和“had to”。

× My father abandoned me from using the computer.

✓ My father forbade me from using the computer.

“abandoned me from”用法错误，应使用“forbade me from”表示禁止某人做某事。

× I think it's so hard for me because the website.

✓ I think it was so hard for me because of the website restrictions.

句子结构不完整，“because the website”缺少介词和补充说明，改为“because of the website restrictions”更完整。

× I think I spend quite a lot of time online, but I don't think it's too much because online is important for everyone to maintain their knowledge and keep in touch with the others.

✓ I think I spend quite a lot of time online, but I don't think it's too much because being online is important for everyone to maintain their knowledge and keep in touch with others.

“online”作为形容词时应加“being”构成动名词短语。去掉“the”因为“others”前不需要定冠词。

× So I think online is essential for for.

✓ So I think being online is essential for everyone.

句子不完整，补充“being online”和“everyone”使句子完整且语法正确。

× I think it will be very inconvenient for me to get note about the words on the latest news and the knowledge I may have to ask people, but it's difficult to Fact Check the reality. So I.

✓ I think it will be very inconvenient for me to get notes about the words in the latest news and knowledge. I may have to ask people, but it's difficult to fact-check the reality. So I would...

句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性和完整性。将“note”改为复数“notes”，“on”改为“in”，“Fact Check”改为小写“fact-check”，并补充句尾使句子完整。