网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I started using the internet when I was about 12 years old, after entering secondary school. At that time, I needed to do projects, so I began searching for information online using browsers like Google Chrome.

建议: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases like 'indifferent games'. Try to use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

示例: I go online every day. Besides searching for information on websites, I also enjoy watching videos on YouTube and playing online games through my browser.

建议: Your answer has some grammar errors and lacks linking words. Try to improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer clearer and more natural. Also, provide a bit more detail to enrich your response.

示例: Yes, I remember once during a high school project when my group mates and I were not allowed to use the internet. Instead, we had to plan a tour trip to Paris using only books and magazines.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and has grammar mistakes. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use correct grammar. Also, avoid vague phrases and add linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I often scroll through social media to see other people's lives, which can be quite addictive.

建议: Your answer is good but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and use linking words to connect ideas naturally. Also, avoid mentioning 'scrolling on the Internet' when talking about what you would do without it.

示例: Without the internet, I would exercise more. For instance, I enjoy running along the seaside in the evening because the stunning view helps me relax.

× I started using Internet maybe at the age of 12 when I got into my secondary school and I have to do some projects and I searched some online resource on the website.

✓ I started using the Internet maybe at the age of 12 when I got into my secondary school and I had to do some projects and I searched for some online resources on websites.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun and usually preceded by the definite article 'the'. Also, 'have to' should be in past tense 'had to' to match the past context. 'Searched some online resource' is incorrect; it should be 'searched for some online resources' because 'search' requires the preposition 'for' and 'resources' should be plural to match 'some'.

× Therefore, since that time I started to use the Internet such as Google Chrome to search for some.

✓ Therefore, since that time I started to use the Internet, such as Google Chrome, to search for information.

The phrase 'such as Google Chrome' should be set off by commas to clarify the example. Also, 'search for some' is incomplete; it should specify what is being searched for, e.g., 'search for information'.

× I often go online everyday.

✓ I often go online every day.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal, but here the adverbial phrase 'every day' (two words) is correct to indicate frequency.

× Besides searching some online resources on some websites, I also use the Internet to browse to indifferent games and apps such as watching YouTube, playing online games using the online browser.

✓ Besides searching for some online resources on various websites, I also use the Internet to browse different games and apps such as watching YouTube and playing online games using the online browser.

'Searching' requires the preposition 'for'. 'Indifferent' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'different'. Also, 'browse to' is incorrect; it should be 'browse' without 'to'. The sentence is improved by adding 'and' to connect activities properly.

× Yes, I remembered a time in my high school project and me and my group mates were not allowed to use the Internet and we have had to plan a tour trip to Paris.

✓ Yes, I remember a time during my high school project when my group mates and I were not allowed to use the Internet and we had to plan a tour trip to Paris.

'Remembered' is past tense but the context suggests present perfect or simple present 'remember'. 'Me and my group mates' should be 'my group mates and I' as the subject. 'Have had to' is incorrect here; past simple 'had to' fits better.

× Yes, I think I'm somehow addicted to being online because I like to scroll on the social media page and look into others peoples life.

✓ Yes, I think I'm somehow addicted to being online because I like to scroll through social media pages and look into other people's lives.

'Scroll on' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'scroll through'. 'Others peoples life' is incorrect; it should be 'other people's lives' to show possession and plural form.

× I would try to do some exercise besides scrolling on the Internet page.

✓ I would try to do some exercise besides scrolling through Internet pages.

'Scrolling on' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'scrolling through'. Also, 'Internet page' is better as 'Internet pages' to indicate general browsing.

× For example, I like to go out for running in the evening time along the seaside because the view is stunning and it is a really relaxing activity for me.

✓ For example, I like to go out for a run in the evening along the seaside because the view is stunning and it is a really relaxing activity for me.

'Go out for running' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go out for a run'. 'In the evening time' is better as 'in the evening' for natural expression.