网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, say when you started using the internet and why, then explain its benefits clearly.

示例: I started using the internet when I was a child to help me complete a school project about the history of my hometown. Since then, I have found it very useful because it provides a wide range of information. Moreover, it is convenient since I don't have to go to the bookstore to find resources.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary related to communication and social media.

示例: I go online every day, mainly for work and socialising. For instance, I use the internet to communicate with my colleagues and keep in touch with my friends by sending messages and sharing posts on WeChat. This helps me stay updated and connected with others.

建议: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide specific details with linking words. Also, improve sentence structure and vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

示例: Yes, I remember when I visited a remote beach island in Malaysia where there was no internet access. It was quiet and isolated, and it took a few hours by boat to get there. Although I didn't enjoy swimming much, the experience was refreshing because I could disconnect from the online world.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use a wider range of vocabulary related to time management and internet use.

示例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I am disciplined in managing my internet use. I usually go online only for work or to catch up with important news from my friends and family. Additionally, I avoid staying up late browsing the internet.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words. Also, improve sentence structure and vocabulary to express your ideas fully.

示例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time meeting friends in person to maintain social connections. Relying only on online communication can sometimes make me feel lonely, so I would also travel more to experience new places and meet different people.

× I started to use Internet when I was child as to finish a writing task of my of the histories of my living place.

✓ I started to use the Internet when I was a child to finish a writing task about the history of my living place.

The sentence has singular and plural issues: 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the' as it is a specific noun; 'child' needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct; 'histories' should be singular 'history' because it refers to the history of one place. Also, 'of my of the histories' is redundant and incorrect. The phrase is corrected to 'about the history of my living place.'

× Then I turn to intellect.

✓ Then I turn to the internet.

The word 'intellect' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'internet.' Also, 'turn' should be in present tense here as a habitual action, but the main issue is word choice. Correcting to 'turn to the internet' makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× It provides me a wide range information.

✓ It provides me with a wide range of information.

The phrase 'a wide range information' is incorrect; 'information' is uncountable and needs 'a wide range of' before it. Also, the verb 'provides' requires the preposition 'with' to indicate what is provided.

× At the same time I don't need to bothers to go to the bookstore, it's very convenient.

✓ At the same time, I don't need to bother going to the bookstore; it's very convenient.

The verb 'bothers' is incorrect after 'need to'; the base form 'bother' should be used. Also, 'to go' can be better expressed as 'going' after 'need to bother.' The sentence is corrected for verb form and smoother expression.

× I use Internet and do online conversation everyday in my workplace.

✓ I use the Internet and have online conversations every day at my workplace.

'Internet' should be preceded by 'the.' 'Conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to match the context. 'Everyday' is an adjective; the adverb 'every day' is correct here. 'In my workplace' is better expressed as 'at my workplace.'

× I would like to send message to catch up with my friends and also share posts on the WeChat so people will knows that my situation.

✓ I would like to send messages to catch up with my friends and also share posts on WeChat so people will know my situation.

'Message' should be plural 'messages' as it refers to multiple instances. 'The WeChat' is incorrect; 'WeChat' is a proper noun and does not need 'the.' 'Will knows' is incorrect; the verb should be base form 'know' after 'will.' Also, 'that my situation' is better expressed as 'my situation.'

× Stats eyes once I travel to a beach island in seen as in Malaysia is quiet and isolated beach, it takes a few hours to ferry our stair by boat.

✓ Once I traveled to a beach island in Malaysia, which is a quiet and isolated beach; it takes a few hours to get there by boat.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'Stats eyes' is unclear and likely incorrect; omitted. 'Travel' should be past tense 'traveled' to match the past event. 'Seen as in Malaysia' is incorrect; corrected to 'in Malaysia.' 'Quiet' is misspelled as 'quiet.' 'Ferry our stair' is incorrect; corrected to 'get there by boat.' The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct past tense usage.

× I have no interest enjoy playing in the sea on the beach still.

✓ I have no interest in enjoying playing in the sea on the beach still.

The verb 'enjoy' needs the preposition 'in' after 'interest.' Also, 'enjoy' should be in gerund form 'enjoying' after 'interest in.' The sentence is corrected for proper verb form and preposition use.

× No, I don't think so because I have a self disciplines in the in using Internet regularly.

✓ No, I don't think so because I have self-discipline in using the Internet regularly.

'A self disciplines' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'self-discipline' (uncountable). 'In the in using' is redundant; corrected to 'in using.' 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the.'

× I only resort to Internet when I work or when I have something important to catch up connections with my friends or families and I won't stay up late using Internet.

✓ I only resort to the Internet when I work or when I have something important to catch up on with my friends or family, and I won't stay up late using the Internet.

'Resort to Internet' needs 'the Internet.' 'Catch up connections' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'catch up on' connections. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family. Added commas for clarity. 'Using Internet' also needs 'the.'

× I thinks I would like to do small social communication with people as meet up with friends.

✓ I think I would like to do small social communication with people, such as meeting up with friends.

'Thinks' is incorrect for first person singular; it should be 'think.' 'As meet up' is incorrect; corrected to 'such as meeting up' to introduce examples. Added comma for clarity.

× Not only relying on online communication sometimes makes me feel lonely and isolated, I also like to travel more so that to experience the.

✓ Not only relying on online communication sometimes makes me feel lonely and isolated, but I also like to travel more to have new experiences.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. Added 'but' to connect clauses properly. 'So that to experience the' is incorrect; corrected to 'to have new experiences' for clarity and grammatical correctness.