网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. For example, say "I started using the internet when I was in 8th standard because my teacher gave us an assessment that required internet research."

示例: I started using the internet when I was in 8th standard. It was because my teacher assigned a project that needed online research. Since then, I have been using the internet regularly for my studies and other purposes.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, avoid redundancy like "usually often." Try to say how often and why you go online with clear structure.

示例: I usually go online for about two to three hours a day. I mainly use the internet for studying and entertainment, such as watching videos or reading articles.

建议: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Make sure to answer directly and provide complete supporting details with linking words. Also, check grammar and sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I remember once in 12th standard when my teacher gave us an assessment that we had to complete without using the internet. Therefore, I asked my parents for help to finish the project using books and other resources.

建议: Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain reasons. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use appropriate vocabulary.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, which is not good. However, I use the internet mainly for entertainment because I often feel bored at home.

建议: Your answer is too long and has grammatical errors. Try to be concise and clear. Use linking words to explain your feelings and reasons.

示例: I cannot imagine my life without the internet because I use it every day. I think I am somewhat addicted to it, so living without internet would be very difficult for me.

× As far as I can remember when I was in my 8th standard then I used first time Internet Internet and I still remember it was the assessment that gave my teacher and I took help from Internet to complete my project since now I using Internet for my stuff.

✓ As far as I can remember, when I was in my 8th standard, I used the Internet for the first time. I still remember it was for an assessment that my teacher gave, and I took help from the Internet to complete my project. Since then, I have been using the Internet for my stuff.

The original sentence has multiple tense errors and awkward phrasing. 'Used first time Internet Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'used the Internet for the first time.' The phrase 'since now I using Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'since then, I have been using the Internet.' Correct use of past tense and present perfect tense is necessary to convey the timeline properly.

× I usually often go online two to three hours in a day.

✓ I usually go online for two to three hours a day.

The phrase 'usually often' is redundant; either 'usually' or 'often' should be used, not both together. Also, 'two to three hours in a day' should be 'two to three hours a day' for natural English usage.

× I don't use much, but I use Internet only for my study and my entertainment purpose.

✓ I don't use it much, but I use the Internet only for my study and entertainment purposes.

The word 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to it generally. Also, 'my entertainment purpose' should be pluralized to 'entertainment purposes' to sound natural.

× Yes, it was the time of March 12th standard when my teacher gave me assessment.

✓ Yes, it was when I was in 12th standard in March that my teacher gave me an assessment.

The original sentence is awkward and missing articles. 'Gave me assessment' should be 'gave me an assessment.' Also, the time expression is better structured as 'when I was in 12th standard in March'.

× But this assessment have the restriction to use Internet to complete it.

✓ But this assessment had the restriction of using the Internet to complete it.

'Assessment' is singular, so the verb should be 'had' (past tense). Also, 'restriction to use Internet' is incorrect; it should be 'restriction of using the Internet.' The definite article 'the' is needed before 'Internet.'

× Then I take help from my parents to complete my project because it is related to the.

✓ Then I took help from my parents to complete my project because it was related to them.

The verb 'take' should be in past tense 'took' to match the past context. The sentence is incomplete; assuming 'related to them' is intended. Also, 'it is' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Yes, I think I spent too much time online and I also know that is not good, but I am compelled to use the Internet for my entertainment person.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online and I also know that it is not good, but I am compelled to use the Internet for my entertainment purposes.

The phrase 'I spent' is past tense but the question is about current habits, so 'I spend' (present tense) is appropriate. 'That is not good' needs 'it' as subject. 'Entertainment person' is incorrect; it should be 'entertainment purposes.'

× Well, I can't imagine my life without Internet and I cannot able to survive without Internet because I use the Internet on my daily basis and it can be said now I'm in the addiction of Internet that's why I think it is impossible to me to Internet when I spend time.

✓ Well, I can't imagine my life without the Internet and I cannot survive without the Internet because I use it on a daily basis. It can be said that now I'm addicted to the Internet; that's why I think it is impossible for me to spend time without the Internet.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'Internet.' 'Cannot able to survive' is incorrect; 'cannot survive' is correct. 'On my daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis.' 'I'm in the addiction of Internet' should be 'I'm addicted to the Internet.' The last part is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.