网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中有语法错误和重复词汇，表达不够自然。建议注意时态和冠词的使用，避免重复，同时句子结构应更清晰。

示例: I started using the Internet when I was in primary school, around the third grade. At that time, I used it mainly to watch Japanese animations, which was my first reason for going online.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使表达更连贯，并注意时态和介词的正确使用。

示例: I go online almost every day, usually from 8:00 AM to 10:00 PM. Currently, I am doing an internship in a communication company, so I often search for information online, which also benefits my future academic studies.

建议: 回答语法混乱，表达不清晰。建议理清时间顺序，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复，明确说明原因。

示例: Yes, during my high school years, especially from the second to the third grade, I was not allowed to use mobile phones or the Internet all day because I needed to focus on my studies.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不连贯的问题。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，句子结构应更完整和连贯。

示例: Recently, I think I spend too much time online, and I find it hard to control because I keep searching for things that interest me, such as novels, fiction, films, and animations. Although I want to change this habit, I haven't been able to.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用正确的词汇和句子结构。

示例: If I didn't have the Internet, I would prefer to read books because I spend most of my time reading novels and fiction. Also, I would continue my hobby of drawing pictures, which I have been practicing for about eight years.

× I started using the Internet when I primary school, especially in the the 3rd grade.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in primary school, especially in the 3rd grade.

句子中缺少动词“was”，导致时态错误。应使用过去时态“was”来描述过去的状态。

× especially in the the 3rd grade.

✓ especially in the 3rd grade.

“the”重复使用，属于冠词使用错误，应删除多余的“the”。

× Yeah, that time I was it was my first time to watch the Japanese animation and this first reason why I use the Internet.

✓ Yeah, that time was my first time watching Japanese animation, and this is the first reason why I use the Internet.

句子结构混乱，重复使用“was”，且动词形式不正确。应调整句子结构，使用正确的动名词形式“watching”，并补充缺失的连词“is”。

× Probably from probably like every day and it's from 8 P 8:00 AM to the 10:00 PM because now I have do the internship in communication on the in the company.

✓ Probably like every day, from 8:00 AM to 10:00 PM, because now I have to do an internship in communication in the company.

介词使用错误，“have do”应为“have to do”，表示必须做某事；“on the in the company”重复且错误，应为“in the company”。

× So it's really important to search information from the Internet and it's really benefit from my future academic study.

✓ So it's really important to search for information on the Internet, and it really benefits my future academic study.

“search information”应为“search for information”，介词使用错误；“it's really benefit”应为“it really benefits”，动词形式错误。

× Yes, especially my student time is happened about like all day, especially from the premier high school to the high school.

✓ Yes, especially during my student time, it happened almost all day, especially from junior high school to high school.

“is happened”时态错误，应使用过去时“happened”；“premier high school”应为“junior high school”，词汇错误。

× I was abandoned using high using mobile phones and Internet from the tooth grade to this to the third grade in the in the high school because I would I need to focusing on the study and.

✓ I was forbidden from using mobile phones and the Internet from the tenth grade to the twelfth grade in high school because I needed to focus on my studies.

“abandoned using”用词错误，应为“forbidden from using”；“tooth grade”应为“tenth grade”；“need to focusing”动词形式错误，应为“needed to focus”；句子结构不完整，需调整。

× Probably from probably like every day and it's from 8 P 8:00 AM to the 10:00 PM because now I have do the internship in communication on the in the company.

✓ I probably go online every day from 8:00 AM to 10:00 PM because now I have to do an internship in communication in the company.

句子缺少主语和谓语，时态和结构不完整，需补充完整句子。

× There's too much things.

✓ There are too many things.

“things”是可数名词复数，需用“are”而非“is”，且“much”用于不可数名词，应改为“many”。

× I was interested about it, unlike the novels, fictions, films and animations.

✓ I am interested in it, including novels, fictions, films, and animations.

“was interested about”用法错误，应为“am interested in”；“unlike”用法不当，应为“including”或“such as”。

× I think I I wanted to change it, but I just cannot.

✓ I think I want to change it, but I just cannot.

时态错误，“wanted”应为现在时“want”，因为表达的是当前想法。

× the most most is the things I spend the most of my time on.

✓ The most is the thing I spend most of my time on.

“most most”重复，应删除一个；“things”应为单数“thing”，与“the most”搭配。

× It's just reading the novels and some fictional.

✓ It's just reading novels and some fiction.

“fictional”是形容词，需用名词“fiction”；“the novels”改为“novels”更自然。

× So I think I do have mobile phone or Internet.

✓ So I think if I don't have a mobile phone or Internet,

句子缺少条件连词“if”，且“do have”用法不当，应为“don't have”。

× I would do like reading book and join the picture because that's my hobby.

✓ I would read books and join painting classes because that's my hobby.

“do like reading book”结构不正确，应为“read books”；“join the picture”表达不清，应为“join painting classes”。

× I was studying about eight years.

✓ I have been studying for about eight years.

表达持续时间应使用现在完成进行时“have been studying”，并加介词“for”。