网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够连贯，时态和语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复和语法错误，句子结构应更清晰。

示例: I started using the internet when I was six years old because I received a new iPad as a birthday present. Since then, I have spent a lot of time playing on it, which unfortunately affected my eyesight.

建议: 表达不清晰且有语法错误，句子重复，缺乏连贯性。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复，使用正确的语法。

示例: I usually spend about 15 hours online each day if I don't have any tasks to do. I know it sounds excessive, but I do spend a lot of time on the internet.

建议: 回答较完整，但用词不准确，句子稍显复杂。建议简化表达，使用更准确的词汇，注意连贯性。

示例: Yes, during weekdays, my parents don't allow me to use the internet for entertainment like watching videos or playing games on WeChat. They want me to focus on my studies, so I can only use the internet for schoolwork at those times.

建议: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议理清思路，使用正确的语法和词汇，表达更自然。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, which has worsened my eyesight. However, I have to spend a lot of time online because I need the internet to complete my school homework.

建议: 回答内容较好，但有语法和拼写错误，表达不够流畅。建议注意拼写，避免重复，句子更简洁自然。

示例: Without the internet, I would probably listen to music. I have a CD player in my bedroom, and when I want to relax or refresh myself, I listen to pop or classical music.

× Maybe it started when I was six years old.

✓ Maybe it started when I was six years old.

该句时态正确，无需修改。

× I get a new iPad and it is my birthday present.

✓ I got a new iPad and it was my birthday present.

句中描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去式。"get"应改为"got"，"is"应改为"was"。

× I spent time on playing iPad day by day and I finally get a glasses.

✓ I spent time playing on the iPad day by day and I finally got glasses.

"spend time"后应直接接动名词，去掉"on"。"playing iPad"应改为"playing on the iPad"。"get a glasses"中"glasses"为复数，且动词时态应为过去式。

× If I got a form and nobody force me to play it, I may maybe I spend online in 15 hours a day.

✓ If I get a phone and nobody forces me to stop playing it, I may spend up to 15 hours online a day.

条件句中应使用一般现在时"get"，主句中"may maybe I spend"表达重复且不自然，改为"may spend"。"force"应加第三人称单数形式"forces"。"form"应为"phone"。

× I I know it sounds crazy but I do spend a lot of time online.

✓ I know it sounds crazy but I do spend a lot of time online.

句中"I I"重复，应删除一个"I"。

× Actually, I remember that during the weekdays my parents don't allow me to use the Internet for entitlement such as watching videos or playing games on We Chat.

✓ Actually, I remember that during the weekdays my parents don't allow me to use the Internet for entertainment such as watching videos or playing games on WeChat.

"entitlement"用词错误，应为"entertainment"。"We Chat"应写为"WeChat"。

× They want me to focus on my studies, so I can only use Internet for school work during that time.

✓ They want me to focus on my studies, so I can only use the Internet for school work during that time.

"Internet"前应加定冠词"the"。

× Yes actually because I almost spend my day on online so I get a worse eyesight.

✓ Yes, actually because I almost spend my day online, so my eyesight has gotten worse.

"spend my day on online"中"on"多余，应去掉。"get a worse eyesight"表达不自然，应改为"my eyesight has gotten worse"。

× However, I must spend too much time because my school homework need my form to finish my homework.

✓ However, I must spend too much time because my school homework needs me to finish it.

"must spend too much time"表达不准确，应为"have to spend"。"homework need my form"语法错误，应为"homework needs me"。"form"应为"time"或去掉。

× Maybe listening to some music.

✓ Maybe I would listen to some music.

该句缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整句子。

× I got ACD player in my bedroom and when I want to relax or or refresh myself I may listen to some pop music or classical music without the Internet.

✓ I have a CD player in my bedroom, and when I want to relax or refresh myself, I may listen to some pop music or classical music without the Internet.

"got"用法不当，应为现在时"have"。"ACD"应为"CD"。句中"or or"重复，应删除一个。