网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Try to start with a direct response, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect word forms.

示例: I started using the internet when I was in high school. Since then, I have continued to use it because it provides a lot of information and helps us communicate with others easily.

建议: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Use correct verb tenses and linking words to make your response coherent. Provide specific details about your online activities.

示例: I go online quite often, mainly to talk to my parents and family. Besides that, I use the internet to search for information when needed.

建议: Your answer is relevant but needs better grammar and clearer structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, when I was a child, my parents didn't allow me to use the internet because they thought it would distract me from studying.

建议: Your answer is somewhat confusing. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use proper grammar. Explain your activities online with linking words.

示例: I don't think I spend too much time online. I mainly use the internet to scroll through news feeds, search for new information, and watch educational videos for my work.

建议: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and complete sentences. Provide specific examples of what you would do without the internet.

示例: Without the internet, life would be very boring. I would spend more time visiting markets and meeting people in person instead of scrolling through photos and videos online.

× I started using Internet when I was in high school and it's still I use Internet because Internet is gives us lots of more information and also helps of us to communication with our.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in high school and I still use the Internet because the Internet gives us a lot more information and also helps us to communicate with others.

The sentence has multiple issues related to the use of 'there be' and article usage. 'Internet' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' because it is a specific noun. The phrase 'Internet is gives' is incorrect; 'is' should be removed to correct the verb form. 'Lots of more information' is incorrect; 'a lot more information' is the proper quantifier. 'Helps of us to communication' is incorrect; it should be 'helps us to communicate' because 'help' is followed by an object pronoun and the base form of the verb. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I often go on online because I only go online to talk to my parents and my families.

✓ I often go online because I only go online to talk to my parents and my family.

The phrase 'go on online' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go online' without the preposition 'on'. Also, 'my families' is incorrect because 'family' is usually treated as a singular collective noun when referring to one's own family, so 'my family' is correct.

× Otherwise I didn't go online anyway.

✓ Otherwise, I don't go online anyway.

The sentence uses 'didn't' which is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action in the present. Therefore, the present tense 'don't' is appropriate. Adding a comma after 'Otherwise' improves readability.

× And if I wanted to source anything I wanna go online, otherwise I didn't.

✓ And if I want to find anything, I go online; otherwise, I don't.

'Wanted' is past tense, but the sentence refers to a general present condition, so 'want' is correct. 'Wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to'. 'Source' is not the correct verb here; 'find' or 'look for' is better. 'Didn't' is past tense and should be 'don't' to match the present tense context. Punctuation is added for clarity.

× Yeah, when I was a child, my parents didn't allow me to use Internet because Internet distracts all, distract us from our studies.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet because the Internet distracts us from our studies.

'Internet' should be preceded by 'the'. The phrase 'distracts all' is incorrect and unnecessary; 'distracts us' is sufficient. The verb 'distracts' is present tense and correctly used here to express a general truth.

× So my parent didn't allow us to use Internet.

✓ So my parents didn't allow us to use the Internet.

'Parent' should be plural 'parents' to match the subject earlier. 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Not exactly an online but scrolling news feed and I was spending time with searching new things and watching useful videos.

✓ Not exactly online, but I spend time scrolling through news feeds, searching for new things, and watching useful videos.

The original sentence is fragmented and has tense inconsistencies. 'An online' is incorrect; 'online' is an adverb here. 'I was spending time with searching' is awkward; it should be 'I spend time searching'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I use lots of Internet for doing my work.

✓ I use the Internet a lot for doing my work.

'Lots of Internet' is incorrect; 'the Internet' is the correct noun phrase. 'A lot' is used to indicate frequency or amount. The preposition 'for' is correctly used before the gerund 'doing'.

× Without Internet it would be like a date body to live.

✓ Without the Internet, it would be like a dead body to live.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'date body' is a misspelling of 'dead body'. A comma after 'Internet' improves readability.

× It's so bored and I just scroll some are new photos videos and I saw this them and I go to visit market and also I make.

✓ It's so boring, and I just scroll through some new photos and videos. I see them, then I go to visit the market, and I also make things.

'Bored' is an adjective describing a feeling; 'boring' describes something that causes boredom. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; it is restructured for clarity. 'Scroll some are new photos videos' is incorrect; 'scroll through some new photos and videos' is correct. 'Saw' is past tense; 'see' is present tense to match the context. 'Visit market' requires the definite article 'the market'. The last part 'I also make' is incomplete; 'make things' is added for clarity.