网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且内容有些冗长。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

示例: I started using the Internet when I was a child because my parents were busy with work, so I often used my phone to go online.

建议: 回答较为完整，但表达稍显复杂且有些冗余。建议使用更自然的表达方式，避免使用“temptations”一词，改用更贴切的词汇。

示例: I go online every day because the Internet offers a lot of interesting information and videos that are hard to resist.

建议: 语法错误严重，句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议加强语法基础，注意时态和主谓一致，简化句子并明确表达意思。

示例: Yes, I remember during high school exams, my mother didn't allow me to use the Internet because she thought I was addicted and worried it would affect my grades.

建议: 表达基本清楚，但最后一句语法错误且用词不当。建议使用正确的表达方式，如“It is very tempting”或“I find it hard to resist.”

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, I usually spend six or seven hours a day on my phone because it's very tempting.

建议: 回答内容较好，但表达稍显冗长且用词不够准确。建议简化句子，使用更自然的表达，如“distractions”代替“temptations”。

示例: Without the Internet, I would spend more time outside or go shopping with my parents because I enjoy those moments without distractions.

× I started using the Internet since I was a child because my parents were busy with their work so that they didn't have enough time to play with me and I just used the cell phone and used the Internet.

✓ I have been using the Internet since I was a child because my parents were busy with their work so they didn't have enough time to play with me, so I just used the cell phone and the Internet.

句中“started using the Internet since I was a child”时态不当，表示从过去持续到现在的动作应使用现在完成时。建议用“have been using”表示从过去持续到现在的动作。

× I started using the Internet since I was a child because my parents were busy with their work so that they didn't have enough time to play with me and I just used the cell phone and used the Internet.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a child because my parents were busy with their work so they didn't have enough time to play with me, so I just used the cell phone and the Internet.

“since”用于表示从某一时间点开始持续到现在，通常与完成时态连用。此处应使用“when”表示过去某一时间点。

× I go online every day because nowadays the Internet is developing so quickly that we just can't escape the temptations of the various information or videos online.

✓ I go online every day because nowadays the Internet is developing so quickly that we just can't escape the temptations of various information or videos online.

“information”是不可数名词，前面不应加冠词“the”。

× Yes, I remember when I filed an exam in high school, I weren't allowed to use the Internet because my mother thought I was addicted to the Internet, that I didn't got her a high mark.

✓ Yes, I remember when I failed an exam in high school, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my mother thought I was addicted to the Internet and that I didn't get her a high mark.

“filed an exam”应为“failed an exam”，表示考试不及格。主语“I”与“weren't”不一致，应为“wasn't”。“didn't got”错误，助动词“did”后应接动词原形“get”。

× Yes, I remember when I filed an exam in high school, I weren't allowed to use the Internet because my mother thought I was addicted to the Internet, that I didn't got her a high mark.

✓ Yes, I remember when I failed an exam in high school, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my mother thought I was addicted to the Internet and that I didn't get a high mark.

“didn't got her a high mark”中“her”使用错误，应去掉，且“didn't got”应为“didn't get”。

× Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, I always spend at least 6 or 7 hours a day on the cell phone. But I just can't control myself. It's so tempted.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, I always spend at least 6 or 7 hours a day on the cell phone. But I just can't control myself. It's so tempting.

“It's so tempted”中“tempted”是形容词的过去分词形式，表示被诱惑的状态，语境应使用“tempting”表示令人诱惑的。

× I think I'll go outside or go to the supermarket with my parents because I enjoy doing some small things with them and without the temptations of Internet, I think I can totally immerse in such activity.

✓ I think I'll go outside or go to the supermarket with my parents because I enjoy doing some small things with them and without the temptations of the Internet, I think I can totally immerse myself in such activities.

“temptations of Internet”缺少定冠词“the”，应为“the Internet”。“immerse in”后应加反身代词“myself”。“activity”应为复数形式“activities”，因为前文提到的是多项活动。