网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，且句子结构较为混乱。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免语法错误，并且补充具体细节。

示例: I started using the internet when I was in middle school. At that time, I mainly used QQ, a popular chat app, to communicate with my friends and family because it was very convenient.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议使用更准确的时态和表达方式，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: I go online almost every day because I use WeChat, a popular chat app. It allows me to send text messages to my family and friends, and it's very convenient for sharing interesting things.

建议: 回答没有直接回应“被禁止使用互联网”的问题，内容偏离主题。建议直接回答问题，并用具体细节支持。

示例: Yes, once my parents didn't allow me to use the internet for a week to help me focus on my studies. During that time, I chose to go running regularly to stay healthy and relieve stress.

建议: 回答较为自然，但句子结构和连接词使用不足。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并丰富细节。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially on social media websites like TikTok. I often browse many interesting videos, and I also use WeChat to keep in touch with my friends.

建议: 回答没有直接回答“没有互联网时会做什么”的问题，内容重复。建议直接回答问题并提供具体替代活动。

示例: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading books and exercising outdoors. I would also meet my friends in person to stay connected.

× Well, I started using the Internet when I was a middle school because their famous app called QQ, which is a chat app, you can communicate with your friends and families.

✓ Well, I started using the Internet when I was in middle school because there was a famous app called QQ, which is a chat app; you can communicate with your friends and family.

这里的'middle school'是不可数名词，前面需要加介词'in'表示时间点；'their'指代不明确，应改为'there was'表示存在；'families'应为单数形式'family'，因为指的是亲人整体。

× Well, I started using the Internet when I was a middle school because their famous app called QQ, which is a chat app, you can communicate with your friends and families.

✓ Well, I started using the Internet when I was in middle school because there was a famous app called QQ, which is a chat app; you can communicate with your friends and family.

'when I was a middle school'中缺少介词'in'，正确表达是'in middle school'，表示在中学时期。

× Well, I started using the Internet when I was a middle school because their famous app called QQ, which is a chat app, you can communicate with your friends and families.

✓ Well, I started using the Internet when I was in middle school because there was a famous app called QQ, which is a chat app; you can communicate with your friends and family.

句中'their famous app'用法错误，应使用'there was'表示存在某物。

× I almost go online every day because there is a famous app called We Chat. It's a chat app which you can use text and words messages to send you to family and friends.

✓ I almost go online every day because there is a famous app called WeChat. It's a chat app which you can use to send text and voice messages to your family and friends.

'words messages'应为'voice messages'或'text messages'，且缺少介词'to'；'send you to family and friends'结构错误，应为'send ... to your family and friends'。

× It's a chat app which you can use text and words messages to send you to family and friends.

✓ It's a chat app which you can use to send text and voice messages to your family and friends.

动词'use'后应接不定式'to send'，且介词'to'用于表示发送对象。

× Yes, I choose to go for running because I find it good to keep my physically healthy and raise my pressure from cases and when I finish a long distance run I can get great sense of achievement and refreshing.

✓ Yes, I choose to go running because I find it good to keep myself physically healthy and reduce my stress from cases, and when I finish a long-distance run, I can get a great sense of achievement and feel refreshed.

'go for running'应为'go running'；'physically healthy'前应加反身代词'myself'；'raise my pressure'表达错误，应为'reduce my stress'；'great sense of achievement and refreshing'应为'great sense of achievement and feel refreshed'。

× Yes, I choose to go for running because I find it good to keep my physically healthy and raise my pressure from cases and when I finish a long distance run I can get great sense of achievement and refreshing.

✓ Yes, I choose to go running because I find it good to keep myself physically healthy and reduce my stress from cases, and when I finish a long-distance run, I can get a great sense of achievement and feel refreshed.

'my physically healthy'中缺少反身代词，应为'myself'；'pressure'用词不当，应为'stress'。

× Yes, I think I spend too much time online especially in some media website like TikTok.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially on some media websites like TikTok.

'media website'应为复数形式'websites'，且介词应为'on'而非'in'。

× Yes, I think I spend too much time online especially in some media website like TikTok.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially on some media websites like TikTok.

'in some media website'中介词用错，应为'on some media websites'。

× I always browse many interesting videos on it and I also use the WeChat I keep in touch with my friends.

✓ I always browse many interesting videos on it, and I also use WeChat to keep in touch with my friends.

'use the WeChat I keep in touch'结构不完整，缺少不定式'to keep'；'the WeChat'中'the'不必要，应为'WeChat'。

× I also use the WeChat I keep in touch with my friends.

✓ I also use WeChat to keep in touch with my friends.

'WeChat'作为专有名词，不需要定冠词'the'。

× Well, as I have mentioned before, I always use WeChat app.

✓ Well, as I have mentioned before, I always use the WeChat app.

'WeChat app'前应加定冠词'the'，表示特指该应用。

× I can keep in touch with my family and friends and I can share interesting things which happen in my life.

✓ I can keep in touch with my family and friends, and I can share interesting things that happen in my life.

关系代词'which'用于限定性从句时，口语中更常用'that'，使表达更自然。

× Besides, I use TikTok to browse some interesting videos.

✓ Besides, I use TikTok to browse some interesting videos.

该句无明显语法错误，符合语法规范。