网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and use correct verb tenses. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I started using the internet when I was in 8th grade because I had difficulties in subjects like mathematics and science. Since then, the internet has helped me a lot by providing answers to my questions and improving my studies.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has some repetition and minor grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid repeating words and use more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific examples.

示例: I don't go online very often, but I usually use the internet when I have problems to solve or want to chat with my friends. For example, I often use Instagram and other social media platforms when I feel bored.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense correctly and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I remember when I was in fifth grade, my father bought a mobile phone for the first time. He strictly restricted me from using it because he wanted me to focus on my studies instead of other activities.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and repetitions. Try to express your ideas clearly using correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I don't think I spend too much time online because I have a busy schedule. For example, I rarely use Snapchat since I focus more on my studies to get good grades.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, organize your answer with a topic sentence and supporting details, and use linking words to make your response coherent.

示例: If the internet was not available, I would spend my time playing indoor or outdoor games with my sisters. For instance, last year when the government banned internet access for a month, I spent more time with my childhood friends, which strengthened our bonds.

× I was in 8th standard at a time I started to using the Internet because at that time I faced a lot of difficulties

✓ I was in 8th standard when I started using the Internet because at that time I faced a lot of difficulties

The phrase 'at a time' is incorrect; 'when' is the proper conjunction to indicate the time of starting. Also, 'started to using' is incorrect; it should be 'started using' because 'start' is followed by the gerund form without 'to'.

× I started to using the Internet

✓ I started using the Internet

'Start' can be followed by either the infinitive without 'to' or the gerund form. The phrase 'started to using' is incorrect; it should be 'started using'.

× it's have a good impact on my study also

✓ it has a good impact on my study also

'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' or 'it has'. Here, 'have' does not agree with the singular subject 'it'. The correct verb form is 'has'. Thus, 'it has a good impact' is correct.

× I have a lot of doubts, which is quite difficult for me to solve for my teacher

✓ I have a lot of doubts, which are quite difficult for me to solve for my teacher

'Doubts' is plural, so the relative pronoun 'which' refers to a plural noun and should be followed by the plural verb 'are' instead of 'is'.

× I started to use the Internet and it's have a good impact on my study also

✓ I started to use the Internet and it has a good impact on my studies as well

'On my study' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on my studies'. Also, 'also' is better replaced with 'as well' for naturalness.

× Not not very often, but sometime when I have any issues or I want to do a chit chat with my friends

✓ Not very often, but sometimes when I have any issues or I want to chat with my friends

'Sometime' is an adverb meaning 'at some point', but here the plural adverb 'sometimes' is needed to indicate frequency. Also, 'do a chit chat' is incorrect; 'chat' is an uncountable noun or verb, so 'do a chit chat' should be 'chat'.

× I mainly like to use the instagrams or any other social platform

✓ I mainly like to use Instagram or any other social platform

'Instagrams' is incorrect as Instagram is a proper noun and uncountable in this context. Also, 'social platform' should be plural 'social platforms' to match 'any other'.

× I was in fifth standard and that I my father first time purchased the mobile phone

✓ I was in fifth standard when my father purchased a mobile phone for the first time

The phrase 'that I my father first time purchased' is ungrammatical. The correct past tense structure is 'when my father purchased a mobile phone for the first time'.

× So they are strictly restrict me to use a mobile phones

✓ So they strictly restricted me from using mobile phones

'They' is incorrect as the subject refers to 'my father' (singular). Also, 'restrict me to use' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'restricted me from using'. 'Mobile phones' should be plural without 'a'.

× because at that time he want that I should focus on my study rather than any other activities

✓ because at that time he wanted me to focus on my studies rather than any other activities

'Want' should be in past tense 'wanted' to match the past context. The phrase 'he want that I should focus' is incorrect; the correct form is 'he wanted me to focus'.

× I have spent too much time on online because of my busy schedule

✓ I have not spent too much time online because of my busy schedule

'On online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'time online'. Also, the sentence context suggests negation, so 'have not spent' is appropriate.

× I hardly got a time to spend on online

✓ I hardly got time to spend online

'A time' is incorrect; 'time' is uncountable here and does not need an article. Also, 'on online' is incorrect; it should be 'online' without a preposition.

× Now I really used it in my life because I am too much indulged in my studies

✓ Now I rarely use it in my life because I am too much involved in my studies

'Really used it' is awkward; 'rarely use it' fits better. 'Indulged in' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'involved in' when referring to studies.

× so that I got a good I will get a good marks in my studies

✓ so that I will get good marks in my studies

The phrase mixes past 'got' and future 'will get'. The correct future tense is 'will get'. Also, 'a good marks' is incorrect; 'marks' is plural and does not need 'a'.

× Well, in case if the Internet is not available, I prefer to play indoor or outdoor games with my sisters

✓ Well, in case the Internet is not available, I prefer to play indoor or outdoor games with my sisters

'In case if' is redundant; 'in case' alone is correct.

× It helped me a lot to to passage my times

✓ It helped me a lot to pass my time

'Passage my times' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'pass my time'.

× last year the government was banned the Internet connection for a month at a time

✓ last year the government banned the Internet connection for a month

'Was banned' is passive and incorrect here; the government is the agent, so active past tense 'banned' is correct. 'At a time' is unnecessary.

× I prefer to spend with my childhood friends and it makes our boards become more stronger

✓ I preferred to spend time with my childhood friends and it made our bonds become stronger

'Prefer' should be past tense 'preferred' to match past context. 'Spend' needs an object like 'time'. 'Boards' is incorrect; the correct word is 'bonds'. 'More stronger' is redundant; 'stronger' alone suffices.