网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は基本的な構造を満たしていますが、文法の誤り（例えば、"using Internet"ではなく"using the Internet"）や冗長な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な表現にするために、文法の正確さを意識し、情報を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

示例: I started using the Internet when I was in elementary school. At first, I played games on my parents' computer, which was fun. Gradually, I learned how to use the computer more effectively.

建议: 情報の表現において、文法ミス（"everyday"は副詞としては"every day"が正しい）や不自然な言い回し（"searching the information from that"）があります。より自然な英語表現を使い、具体的な例を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

示例: I use the Internet every day on my phone. There is a lot of useful information online, and I enjoy looking up recipes for dinner while commuting on the train.

建议: 回答が不完全で、文法的な誤り（"didn't want to using"は不自然）や内容の不明瞭さがあります。質問に直接答え、具体的な経験を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

示例: I can't remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my parents let me use it freely. They believed I could learn from my own mistakes.

建议: 文法の誤り（"spend using the phone"は不自然）や文の未完成が見られます。具体的な時間や改善策を明確に述べ、文を完結させる練習をしましょう。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, I use my phone for about three hours a day. I want to reduce this time and focus more on other activities, such as cleaning the house.

建议: 回答が不自然で文法的に誤りが多く、内容も不明瞭です。質問に対して直接的かつ具体的に答え、文を完結させる練習をしましょう。

示例: Without the Internet, I would connect with people by writing letters to my friends and family. Although it might be less convenient, I would appreciate the chance to communicate in a different way.

× I started using Internet when I was an elementary school student.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was an elementary school student.

'Internet' is a unique noun and requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× I use the Internet everyday by phone nowadays.

✓ Nowadays, I use the Internet every day by phone.

The adverb 'nowadays' is better placed at the beginning of the sentence for clarity and natural flow. Also, 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase).

× There are so many information on the Internet and I enjoy searching the information from that.

✓ There is so much information on the Internet and I enjoy searching for information there.

'Information' is an uncountable noun, so 'much' is used instead of 'many'. Also, 'searching for information' is the correct collocation, and 'there' is better than 'from that'.

× For example, I always search for the recipe for dinner every day on the train from my workplace.

✓ For example, I always search for dinner recipes every day on the train from my workplace.

'Recipe' is usually pluralized when talking about types or multiple recipes. Also, 'dinner recipes' is more natural than 'the recipe for dinner' in this context.

× Actually, I didn't want to using Internet because my parents allowed me to use it freely and let me learn from the mistakes I made.

✓ Actually, I didn't want to use the Internet because my parents allowed me to use it freely and let me learn from the mistakes I made.

'Want to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'using' is incorrect; it should be 'use'.

× For example, when I was a child I use the Internet and.

✓ For example, when I was a child I used the Internet.

The sentence is incomplete and 'use' should be in past tense 'used' to match the past time reference.

× Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, I spend using the phone for about 3 hours a day.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, I spend about 3 hours a day using the phone.

'Spend' is followed by a time expression and then the gerund form of the verb. The original sentence misplaces 'using'.

× I think it is too much and I have to reduce the time and focus other things, for example such as cleaning house or.

✓ I think it is too much and I have to reduce the time and focus on other things, for example, cleaning the house.

'Focus' requires the preposition 'on'. Also, 'for example such as' is redundant; use either 'for example' or 'such as'. The sentence was incomplete and needed completion.

× I'm especially interested in what I would connect the people around me by without using the Internet.

✓ I'm especially interested in how I would connect with the people around me without using the Internet.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions. 'Connect with' is the correct phrase, and 'how' fits better than 'what'.

× For example, maybe I write to the friends or families, but I think it is a little bit inconvenient, so I feel thankful to.

✓ For example, maybe I would write to friends or family, but I think it is a little bit inconvenient, so I feel thankful for it.

'The friends or families' is incorrect; 'friends or family' is better. Also, 'thankful to' should be 'thankful for it' to complete the thought.