网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'intent standard' and 'bought a data back'. Try to use clearer expressions and correct grammar. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

示例: I started using the Internet when I was in ninth grade. At that time, I got my first smartphone and bought a data package. The first thing I did online was create an email account.

建议: Your answer is good but you can improve by correcting minor grammar mistakes like 'hour's' should be 'hours'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I usually spend at least four to five hours on the Internet every day. I use it for studying, watching videos, playing games, and chatting with my friends.

建议: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Phrases like 'didn't get in a smartphone' and 'didn't have the access to go to the OR use the Internet' are confusing. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences with correct grammar.

示例: Before I was in ninth grade, I didn't have a smartphone. I used my father's computer to play games or watch movies, but I didn't have permission to use the Internet.

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your ideas and add a reason or consequence to enrich your response.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I use the Internet for about four to five hours daily. I believe I should limit it to one or two hours to have more time for other activities.

建议: Your answer is good but contains minor errors like 'an interest' instead of 'and interests'. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

示例: I cannot imagine life without the Internet. However, if it happened, I think I would spend more time with my loved ones and dedicate more time to my hobbies and interests.

× I started using the Internet when I was intent standard.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in ninth standard.

The phrase 'intent standard' is incorrect; it should be 'in ninth standard' to indicate the grade level. Also, 'ninth' is the correct ordinal number form here.

× I started using the Internet when I was intent standard.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in ninth standard.

The preposition 'in' is required before 'ninth standard' to indicate the time or place.

× I usually spend at least 4 to 5 hour's on the Internet.

✓ I usually spend at least 4 to 5 hours on the Internet.

The word 'hour's' is incorrect; the plural form 'hours' should be used without an apostrophe to indicate multiple hours.

× I usually spend at least 4 to 5 hour's on the Internet.

✓ I usually spend at least 4 to 5 hours on the Internet.

The preposition 'on' is correctly used here; no change needed for preposition.

× I use it for studies, for watching, playing games and chatting with my friends.

✓ I use it for studying, playing games, watching, and chatting with my friends.

The noun 'studies' should be replaced with the gerund 'studying' to match the other activities listed, which are in the '-ing' form.

× I usually used my father's computer to playing games or watching movies, but I didn't have the access to go to the OR use the Internet.

✓ I usually used my father's computer to play games or watch movies, but I didn't have access to go on or use the Internet.

After 'to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'the access' should be 'access' without 'the', and 'go to the OR use' is incorrect; it should be 'go on or use'.

× I didn't have the access to go to the OR use the Internet.

✓ I didn't have access to go on or use the Internet.

The phrase 'go to the OR use' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go on' the Internet, and 'or' should be lowercase and not 'OR'.

× I'm spending about four to five hours on the Internet every day and I think I should not spend more than one or two hours.

✓ I spend about four to five hours on the Internet every day, and I think I should not spend more than one or two hours.

The present simple tense 'I spend' is more appropriate here to describe habitual actions rather than the present continuous 'I'm spending'.

× I cannot imagine a life without the Internet, but if it happened I think I would spend more time with my loved ones and I could give more time to my hobbies an interest.

✓ I cannot imagine a life without the Internet, but if it happened, I think I would spend more time with my loved ones and could give more time to my hobbies and interests.

A comma is needed after 'if it happened' to separate clauses. Also, 'an interest' should be plural 'interests' to match 'hobbies', and 'I could' can be simplified to 'could' for parallelism.