网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more fluent and avoid short, incomplete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide more specific details about your experience.

示例: I started using the internet about 20 years ago, mainly to do research for my studies. At that time, the connection was quite limited and a bit expensive compared to now, but it was very helpful for my education.

建议: Avoid fragmented sentences and be more precise with your time expressions. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and add more specific reasons for going online.

示例: I go online every day because I use the internet for my work and to stay connected with my friends and family back home in the Philippines. In fact, I spend about 90% of my day online.

建议: Try to give a more direct answer and avoid irrelevant details. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clearer explanation.

示例: I don't remember ever being forbidden to use the internet. However, there were times when I chose not to use it, such as when I was watching a movie for a couple of hours.

建议: Improve your grammar by using correct tenses and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific reasons for your internet use.

示例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online. Compared to before, I now spend about 70% of my time on the internet, mainly for work and to stay in touch with my parents back home.

建议: Try to organize your answer more clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a more specific example.

示例: Living without the internet would be very difficult. For example, during a strong storm in the Philippines, the internet connection was cut off, making it hard to communicate with loved ones.

× I believe I started using Internet about 20 years ago.

✓ I believe I started using the Internet about 20 years ago.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it in English. Omitting 'the' is incorrect in this context.

× I started using it. To do research for my studies and it was very helpful.

✓ I started using it to do research for my studies, and it was very helpful.

The original sentence is fragmented. Combining the two parts into one sentence with proper conjunction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× The connection at that time was very limited an A little bit expensive compared to.

✓ The connection at that time was very limited and a little bit expensive compared to now.

The sentence is incomplete and contains capitalization errors. Adding 'and' and completing the comparison clarifies the meaning and corrects the quantifier usage.

× Oh, every day I am on line, mainly because I use it for my work and at the same time I use the Internet to connect with my friends and family back home in the Philippines.

✓ Oh, I am online every day, mainly because I use it for my work and at the same time I use the Internet to connect with my friends and family back home in the Philippines.

The adverbial phrase 'every day' should be placed closer to the verb 'am online' for natural and correct English sentence structure.

× I think about. 90% of the time I am online, everyday it's.

✓ I think about 90% of the time I am online every day.

The original sentence has unnecessary punctuation and awkward phrasing. Removing the period and reordering the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× I don't recall a time that I was not allowed to use the Internet. However, I remember not using Internet for a couple of hours because I was watching movie.

✓ I don't recall a time that I was not allowed to use the Internet. However, I remember not using the Internet for a couple of hours because I was watching a movie.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'Internet' and the indefinite article 'a' is needed before 'movie' to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× Nowadays I only spent about 70% of my time using the Internet, mainly for work and to help me connect with my parents back home.

✓ Nowadays I only spend about 70% of my time using the Internet, mainly for work and to help me connect with my parents back home.

The adverb 'nowadays' indicates present tense, so the verb should be in present tense 'spend' instead of past tense 'spent'.

× Having no Internet at all is very difficult. At some point I remember, uh, during a calamity way back in the Philippines where there was a very strong storm that cut down all the connections.

✓ Having no Internet at all is very difficult. At some point, I remember, uh, during a calamity way back in the Philippines when there was a very strong storm that cut off all the connections.

The preposition 'during' is correct, but 'where' should be replaced with 'when' to refer to the time of the storm. Also, 'cut down' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'cut off' for connections.

× It was very difficult to communicate specially to your loved one.

✓ It was very difficult to communicate, especially with your loved ones.

The word 'specially' should be 'especially' to indicate emphasis. Also, 'to communicate to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with'. 'Loved one' should be plural 'loved ones' to match general meaning.