网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强语法基础，避免拼写错误，并且使句子更通顺自然。

示例: I started using the internet when I was a teenager. At that time, I mainly used it to connect with friends and search for information online.

建议: 回答表达不够流畅，存在语法错误，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意句子结构的完整性。

示例: I used to go online two or three times a week, but now I use the internet almost every day.

建议: 回答中有很多语法和表达错误，句子不完整，建议练习完整句子的表达，并注意逻辑连贯性。

示例: Yes, I remember when I was in high school, my mom bought a computer for me. She was very strict about my daily routine and limited my computer use to a certain amount of time each day.

建议: 回答中有拼写和语法错误，表达不清晰，建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，避免无意义的词汇。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Firstly, I need to connect with my friends and relatives. Besides that, I use the internet for work, which takes up a lot of my time. I believe I should reduce my online time.

建议: 回答不完整且表达混乱，建议练习完整且连贯的句子，清晰表达自己的想法。

示例: If I didn't have the internet, I would read more books and spend more time chatting with my friends face to face, which would help me feel relaxed.

× I remember when I was a teenager around tour via sold, I started to use Internet for connecting with friends, all searching information on line.

✓ I remember when I was a teenager around twenty years old, I started to use the Internet to connect with friends and search for information online.

句中“tour via sold”应为“twenty years old”，是拼写错误；“use Internet for connecting”应改为“use the Internet to connect”，动词形式和介词使用错误；“all searching information on line”应改为“and search for information online”，连接词和动词形式错误。需要使用过去时态描述过去的动作。

× I started to use Internet for connecting with friends, all searching information on line.

✓ I started to use the Internet to connect with friends and search for information online.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，因为特指互联网。

× Previously I remember I used Internet twice of three times a week, but now I almost do use Internet every single day.

✓ Previously, I remember I used the Internet two or three times a week, but now I almost use the Internet every single day.

“twice of three times”表达错误，应为“two or three times”；“do use”多余助动词，应直接用“use”。

× Previously I remember I used Internet twice of three times a week, but now I almost do use Internet every single day.

✓ Previously, I remember I used the Internet two or three times a week, but now I almost use the Internet every single day.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，因为特指互联网。

× I was alluding Lee. Yes. I remember when I was a teenager in high school, my mom bought a computer for me.

✓ I was allowed. Yes. I remember when I was a teenager in high school, my mom bought a computer for me.

“alluding Lee”应为“allowed”，拼写错误，影响句意。

× She was very strict on my everyday's routine, so she asked me. To use computer or our. At most every day.

✓ She was very strict about my daily routine, so she asked me to use the computer for at most one hour every day.

“everyday's routine”应为“daily routine”，形容词使用错误；“use computer or our”不通顺，应明确时间限制；缺少冠词“the”在“computer”前。

× She was very strict on my everyday's routine, so she asked me. To use computer or our. At most every day.

✓ She was very strict about my daily routine, so she asked me to use the computer for at most one hour every day.

“strict on”应为“strict about”，介词使用错误。

× Firstly I need to connect with my friends, relatives, Anka Leaguers on line.

✓ Firstly, I need to connect with my friends, relatives, and colleagues online.

“Anka Leaguers”拼写错误，应为“colleagues”；“on line”应合并为“online”。

× Besides that I have to use Internet for my work so which takes a lot of my time.

✓ Besides that, I have to use the Internet for my work, which takes a lot of my time.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”；“so which”结构错误，应去掉“so”。

× The guys I think I should shot.

✓ I think I should stop.

“The guys”无意义且错误；“shot”应为“stop”，拼写错误。

× Right, if I haven't Internet Archive.

✓ Right, if I didn't have the Internet archive.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”；“haven't”时态和语态错误，应为过去时“didn't have”。

× Right, if I haven't Internet Archive.

✓ Right, if I didn't have the Internet archive.

“Archive”用法不当，可能想表达“access to the Internet”或“Internet”，需根据上下文调整。

× Showed great books out, chat with my friends face to face which makes me feel relaxed.

✓ I would read great books and chat with my friends face to face, which makes me feel relaxed.

句子缺少主语和谓语，结构不完整；“Showed great books out”表达不清，应改为“I would read great books”。