网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达存在较多错误，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并补充具体细节。

示例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. At that time, my teacher taught us how to use Word and PowerPoint on the computer.

建议: 回答中断断续续，表达不流畅，建议使用完整句子，并用连接词使内容连贯。

示例: I go online almost every day because I can search for information when I am confused about my homework. Also, I use the internet for entertainment.

建议: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，建议直接回答问题并说明原因，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: I remember when I was in senior high school, I wasn't allowed to use the internet every day because I needed to focus on preparing for my exams.

建议: 回答内容混乱，表达不清晰，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用具体理由支持。

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. Although it brings me happiness and access to movies, sometimes it wastes my time.

建议: 回答较为清晰，但句子结构简单，建议使用更自然的表达和连接词。

示例: Without the internet, I would play board games with my brother on weekends. Also, I would go outside with my friends to go shopping or play badminton in the park.

× I started there using my the Internet when I was in primary school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in primary school.

句中“my the Internet”中“my”和“the”重复使用，且“there”位置错误，应删除“there”并去掉多余的冠词。

× At that time I first heard used at a computer.

✓ At that time I first used a computer.

“heard used”结构不正确，应直接使用过去式“used”表示过去动作。

× All across.

✓ All around.

“All across”用法不当，表达环境或范围时应使用“All around”。

× The teacher, Tommy, a lot of expertise scales about Word and PPT.

✓ The teacher, Tommy, has a lot of expertise in Word and PPT.

缺少谓语动词“has”，且“expertise scales”表达错误，应改为“has a lot of expertise in”。

× Are you? Go online.

✓ I go online.

“Are you?”不符合语境，应直接回答“I go online.”。

× Becauses I can search the Internet.

✓ Because I can search the Internet.

“Becauses”拼写错误，应为“Because”。

× When I felt confused about my homework.

✓ When I feel confused about my homework.

时态应与上下文一致，使用一般现在时“feel”。

× Uh, also I can get entertainment about it.

✓ Uh, also I can get entertainment from it.

“get entertainment about”搭配错误，应使用“get entertainment from”。

× I remembered when I was in Senior High School.

✓ I remember when I was in Senior High School.

此处描述过去经历，使用一般现在时“remember”更合适。

× Aye. Uh, wasn't allowed to use the Internet every day.

✓ I wasn't allowed to use the Internet every day.

缺少主语“I”，导致句子不完整。

× Especially that we can becaused I prepared for my exam.

✓ Especially because I was preparing for my exam.

“becaused”拼写错误且用法不当，应为“because”，且时态应为过去进行时。

× I spend a lot of time align.

✓ I spend a lot of time online.

“align”拼写错误，应为“online”。

× Uh, so I. Sync.

✓ Uh, so I think so.

句子不完整且“Sync”用法错误，应为“I think so”。

× It is a waste of time for me.

✓ It is a waste of time for me.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× Rite Aid.

✓ Right.

“Rite Aid”拼写错误，应为“Right”。

× It can bring me a lot of, UM, hapiness and a film and. Based.

✓ It can bring me a lot of happiness and fun.

“hapiness”拼写错误，应为“happiness”，且“a film and. Based.”无意义，应改为“and fun”。

× I would have played the task with my brother.

✓ I would have played the game with my brother.

“played the task”表达不当，应为“played the game”。

× Also I will go outside with my friends.

✓ Also, I will go outside with my friends.

缺少逗号，增加句子流畅度。

× To go shopping or play badminton at the park.

✓ To go shopping or play badminton in the park.

“play badminton at the park”中应使用介词“in”表示在公园内。