网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. Avoid unnecessary pauses and ensure sentences are complete. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: I started using the internet when I was in 10th grade to prepare for my board exams. For example, I often watched educational videos on YouTube to understand my subjects better.

建议: Try to speak more clearly and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words like 'because' correctly and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

示例: I usually go online in the evenings because I have classes and a part-time job during the day. Therefore, the evening is the only time I have for leisure activities like browsing the internet.

建议: Your answer needs clearer expression and correct grammar. Explain the situation more specifically and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I remember when I was not allowed to use the internet at night because it can have negative effects, such as harming eyesight. Therefore, my parents set restrictions to protect my health.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by combining sentences and using linking words to make it more coherent and natural.

示例: No, I don't spend too much time online because I have classes in the morning and a part-time job during the day. Consequently, I only go online in the evenings and usually sleep early at night.

建议: Avoid short, choppy sentences. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your ideas clearly and naturally.

示例: If there were no internet, I would spend my day studying and focusing on my goals because I believe that hard work is the key to success in life.

× I started using Internet when I was in my 10th grade to study for my boat exam.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in my 10th grade to study for my boat exam.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it. In English, we say 'the Internet' to refer to the global network.

× I used Internet to watch. Videos on YouTube to learn about my particular subject.

✓ I used the Internet to watch videos on YouTube to learn about my particular subject.

Again, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, the period after 'watch' is incorrect and should be removed to maintain sentence flow.

× I usually go online at evenings bycause since the morning I have my glasses and I do part time job so.

✓ I usually go online in the evenings because since the morning I have my classes and I do a part-time job.

The correct preposition for time periods like 'evenings' is 'in'. 'Bycause' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'Glasses' is incorrect in this context; likely 'classes' was intended. Also, 'part time job' should be 'a part-time job' with hyphen and article.

× The only leisure time I get. Is on evening so I go online at that time.

✓ The only leisure time I get is in the evening, so I go online at that time.

The sentence was incorrectly split. 'The only leisure time I get' and 'Is on evening' should be combined into one sentence. Also, 'on evening' should be 'in the evening' for correct preposition and article usage.

× Yes I do remember when I had restrictions to use the Internet when I was in night create I wasn't allowed to use it becaused it also have negative points.

✓ Yes, I do remember when I had restrictions on using the Internet when I was in night curfew. I wasn't allowed to use it because it also has negative points.

'Restrictions to use' should be 'restrictions on using'. 'Night create' is likely a typo for 'night curfew'. 'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× And it can affect your eyesight.

✓ And it can affect your eyesight.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× No, definitely. I don't spend too much time online because I have my classes in the morning then I have a part time job.

✓ No, definitely. I don't spend too much time online because I have my classes in the morning, then I have a part-time job.

'Part time job' should be hyphenated as 'part-time job' to correctly form the compound adjective.

× The only time I get to go online is on evenings.

✓ The only time I get to go online is in the evenings.

The correct preposition for periods of the day like 'evenings' is 'in', not 'on'.

× And in the night I sleep early so I don't usually go online.

✓ And at night I sleep early, so I don't usually go online.

The correct preposition for 'night' in this context is 'at', not 'in'. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× If there's no Internet, I would spend my. Day. Studying. And focusing on my goals.

✓ If there was no Internet, I would spend my day studying and focusing on my goals.

The conditional sentence requires past tense 'was' after 'if' for hypothetical situations. Also, the sentence was fragmented unnecessarily; it should be one continuous sentence.

× The cause? That is the only thing that will make you successful in your life.

✓ Because that is the only thing that will make you successful in your life.

'The cause?' is incorrect here; 'Because' is the correct conjunction to explain the reason.