网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use the correct tense and article. Instead of 'I have started', say 'I started'. Also, say 'the internet' instead of just 'Internet'. This will make your answer more natural and grammatically correct.

示例: I started using the internet in 2013.

建议: Avoid unnecessary modal verbs like 'could say' and be more direct. Also, use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example, 'I go online every day because I prefer chatting on WhatsApp to face-to-face conversations.'

示例: I go online every day because I prefer chatting on WhatsApp to face-to-face conversations.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words like 'because' properly and be more specific. For example, 'When I was young, my mother didn't allow me to use the internet because I couldn't focus well on my studies.'

示例: When I was young, my mother didn't allow me to use the internet because I couldn't focus well on my studies.

建议: Be careful with word choice and grammar. Use 'effect' instead of 'affect' and avoid repetition like 'a any a'. Also, use linking words to explain your opinion clearly. For example, 'Yes, I spend a lot of time online using Facebook and chatting apps, which negatively affects me because it stops me from doing other things.'

示例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online using Facebook and chatting apps, which negatively affects me because it stops me from doing other things.

建议: Correct spelling mistakes like 'board' to 'bored' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to list activities clearly. For example, 'I think I would feel bored, but I would read a book, help with cooking, or go out with my friends.'

示例: I think I would feel bored, but I would read a book, help with cooking, or go out with my friends.

× I have started using Internet since 2013 I think.

✓ I have been using the internet since 2013, I think.

The present perfect continuous tense ('have been using') is more appropriate here to express an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'Internet' should be preceded by 'the' as it is a specific noun.

× I could say every day because I love chatting rather than face to face conversations on WhatsApp.

✓ I would say every day because I love chatting rather than face-to-face conversations on WhatsApp.

The modal verb 'could' implies possibility, but 'would' is better to express habitual action or preference. Also, 'face to face' should be hyphenated as 'face-to-face' when used as an adjective.

× Yes, when I was young my mother didn't allow me to use Internet.

✓ Yes, when I was young, my mother didn't allow me to use the internet.

The noun 'internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, a comma after 'young' improves sentence clarity.

× Becauses uh, I can't focus.

✓ Because, uh, I couldn't focus.

The sentence refers to a past inability, so 'couldn't' (past tense of 'can') is appropriate instead of 'can't' (present tense). Also, 'Because' is misspelled.

× I couldn't then focus well on my studies so my mother did this.

✓ I couldn't focus well on my studies then, so my mother did this.

The adverb 'then' should be placed after the verb phrase for better sentence flow.

× Yes, I spend a lot of time online using Facebook or a any a chatting application and I think that is a negative affect for me.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time online using Facebook or any chatting application, and I think that has a negative effect on me.

The phrase 'a any a' is incorrect; 'any' alone is sufficient. Also, 'affect' (verb) should be 'effect' (noun) here. The preposition 'on' is needed after 'effect'. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× Becauses it doesn't help me to do other things.

✓ Because it doesn't help me do other things.

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary after 'help' when followed by a bare infinitive verb. Also, 'Because' is misspelled.

× I think I will feel the board, but I will grab a book and read it or A at making the dishes in the kitchen in our home or going out with my friends.

✓ I think I will feel bored, but I will grab a book and read it, or make the dishes in the kitchen at home, or go out with my friends.

'Feel the board' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'bored'. 'A at making the dishes' is incorrect; it should be 'make the dishes'. Also, 'in our home' is better as 'at home'. Parallel structure is improved by using consistent verb forms ('read', 'make', 'go').