网络— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response with correct sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about your experience.

示例: I started using the Internet when I was 13 years old. At first, I didn't know much about it, but I gradually learned how to use it properly. I found that the Internet offers many benefits, such as easy access to information and communication with friends.

建议: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to answer directly and use simple, correct sentences. Use linking words to explain when and why you go online. Avoid unnecessary words and focus on clear communication.

示例: I usually go online when I have work to do or need to text my friends. I use my phone or Wi-Fi to connect to the Internet. Otherwise, I don't go online very often.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas smoothly. Provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

示例: Yes, I remember when I was about 12 years old, my parents did not allow me to use the Internet. At that time, I sometimes hid from them to use it secretly.

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct grammar and use linking words to connect your points. Avoid redundancy and focus on specific reasons.

示例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially on social media. However, I also need to use the Internet for my work, so I often spend a lot of time online.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Be specific about activities you would do without the Internet.

示例: If I didn't have the Internet, I would spend more time with my family, friends, and colleagues. I would also go outside more often to walk in the park and enjoy my time.

× I started using the Internet when I was a 2 will err 13 years old at the time.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 13 years old.

The phrase 'a 2 will err 13 years old' is incorrect and confusing. The correct way to express age is 'I was 13 years old' without any extra words or numbers. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't know anything about Internet, but I started learning how to use it properly and I found in there there are many kind of benefit of using Internet before I say a lot of.

✓ I didn't know anything about the Internet, but I started learning how to use it properly and I found that there are many kinds of benefits of using the Internet.

The sentence has incorrect prepositions and article usage. 'About Internet' should be 'about the Internet' because 'Internet' is a specific noun. 'In there there are many kind of benefit' is incorrect; it should be 'there are many kinds of benefits'. Also, 'before I say a lot of' is unclear and unnecessary.

× So are you still don't go online without? My work so if I have some kind of work or do I have if I have to do text to my friend that then I will go online by using my our internal phone, Wi-Fi or.

✓ So I still don't go online without work. If I have some kind of work or if I have to text my friend, then I will go online using my internal phone or Wi-Fi.

The original sentence has confusing pronoun and sentence structure errors. 'Are you still don't go online without?' is incorrect. It should be 'I still don't go online without work.' Also, 'do I have if I have to do text to my friend that then' is incorrect and should be simplified to 'if I have to text my friend, then'.

× Yeah, I remember when I was about 12 years old, I started using Internet. And that time, my parents. Don't allow me to use use Internet. So at I remember that time when I was hiding from them to use Internet.

✓ Yeah, I remember when I was about 12 years old, I started using the Internet. At that time, my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet. So I remember hiding from them to use the Internet.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and article errors. 'Don't allow' should be 'didn't allow' to match past tense. 'Use use' is a repetition error. 'At I remember that time' is incorrect; it should be 'So I remember'.

× Yeah, I think I spent too much time on online or social media, so it's consuming my more time and it's. Important for me to consuming my time on online so I have to do a lot of work from online. That's why I always spend my a lot of time to be.

✓ Yeah, I think I spend too much time online or on social media, so it's consuming more of my time. It's important for me to manage my time online because I have to do a lot of work there. That's why I always spend a lot of time online.

The sentence has incorrect prepositions like 'on online' which should be 'online' or 'on social media'. 'Consuming my more time' is incorrect; it should be 'consuming more of my time'. Also, verb tenses are inconsistent; 'spent' should be 'spend' to match the present context.

× I would do a lot of things if I don't have Internet. So first of all, I have a lot of time to spend with my household and friends, colleagues and. And I should prepare to go outside to just roaming around like bark and having good time with my.

✓ I would do a lot of things if I didn't have the Internet. First of all, I would have a lot of time to spend with my household, friends, and colleagues. I would also prepare to go outside to just roam around, like in the park, and have a good time with them.

The conditional sentence requires past tense in the 'if' clause: 'if I didn't have the Internet' instead of 'if I don't have Internet'. Also, 'should prepare' is incorrect here; 'would prepare' fits the conditional mood. 'Roaming around like bark' is likely a mispronunciation of 'park'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.