自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct past tense forms (e.g., "learned" → "learned/to learn" or better "learned to ride") and noun phrases ("a bike"), and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes. I learned to ride a bike when I was a child. At first it was difficult, but after practicing many times I finally succeeded, so my mother bought me a bike as a gift.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct articles and plural forms (e.g., "share bikes" or "shared bikes"). Reduce hesitations and avoid awkward phrasing. Provide one or two concrete examples or groups who use them.

示例: Yes, shared bikes are very popular in my country. They are cheap and convenient, so many commuters and business people use them for short trips, especially in crowded cities where parking is difficult.

× Yes, of course when I was a child I used to learn the bike ride, but it's it's very hard for me.

✓ Yes, of course when I was a child I used to learn to ride a bike, but it was very hard for me.

The phrase 'used to' is followed by the base verb 'learn' but the idiomatic expression is 'learn to ride' or 'learn riding' (but 'learn to ride' is preferred). Also 'the bike ride' is incorrect; use 'ride a bike.' The clause refers to the past, so 'it's it's very hard for me' should be 'it was very hard for me' to match past tense. Suggestion: use 'I used to learn to ride a bike' or better 'I learned to ride a bike' and maintain past tense throughout.

× I learn a lot of time and at least I success.

✓ I practiced many times and eventually I succeeded.

The sentence mixes present tense 'learn' with past context. Use past tense 'practiced' or 'learned.' 'A lot of time' is not natural; use 'many times.' 'At least I success' is ungrammatical: 'success' is a noun; use past verb 'succeeded' or phrase 'I was successful.' Suggestion: 'I practiced many times and eventually I succeeded.'

× So my mom, my mom buy me a bike for the gift.

✓ So my mom bought me a bike as a gift.

Tense is wrong: 'buy' should be past 'bought' to match story. 'For the gift' is unnatural; use 'as a gift.' Repetition 'my mom, my mom' should be avoided. Suggestion: 'So my mom bought me a bike as a gift.'

× Yes, I think in my, in our country, the sharing bike is very popular because uh, people did not have lots of bike uh, by their own, So uh, the sharing bike is much cheaper and useful, so many of businessmen will ride the sharing bike.

✓ Yes, I think in our country shared bikes are very popular because people do not have many bikes of their own. Shared bikes are much cheaper and more convenient, so many businessmen ride them.

Multiple issues: 'the sharing bike' is awkward; use 'shared bikes'. Tense consistency: use present simple 'are' for general fact. 'People did not have' should be 'people do not have' for a general truth. 'Lots of bike' is incorrect pluralization and quantifier: use 'many bikes.' 'By their own' is wrong preposition/pronoun: use 'of their own.' 'Useful' should be 'convenient' or 'useful' with comparative form 'more convenient.' 'So many of businessmen will ride' is incorrect article and modal: 'many businessmen ride them' is appropriate for habitual action. Suggestion: keep present simple and correct plural and prepositions.