自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, use correct tense and clear vocabulary, and add one or two specific details. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid fillers. For example, say you had a small bike, mention who helped you (your dad) and give a brief detail such as when you learned to ride or a memorable moment. Use linking words if you add another sentence (e.g., “and”, “so”, “because”).

示例: Yes, I had a small bike when I was a child. My dad removed the stabilizers so I could learn to ride, and I remember feeling proud the first time I rode without falling.

建议: Answer directly, correct vocabulary (bike not bag), and give a specific reason or example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why (cheap, convenient, shared-bike apps) and use a linking word like “because” or “for example.” Avoid hesitations and grammar mistakes (e.g., "most people" not "we most people").

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because shared-bike services are cheap and convenient. For example, many people use dockless bikes to commute short distances instead of taking buses.

× Yes I have a very little bike.

✓ Yes, I had a very small bike.

The question asks about possession in childhood (past), so the verb tense should be past ('had' not 'have'). Also 'very little' is awkward for describing a bike size; use the adjective 'small'. Add a comma after 'Yes'.

× When I was a child my dad pull pulled out the two side umm well off the little bike.

✓ When I was a child my dad pulled off the two side wheels of the little bike.

The sentence describes a past action, so use the past tense verb 'pulled' (not 'pull'). The phrase 'pulled off' is the correct phrasal verb for removing parts. Use 'side wheels' or 'the two side wheels' and place 'of the little bike' at the end for correct word order. Remove filler words like 'umm well'.

× Yes, bags are now very popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are now very popular in our country.

This appears to be a typographical or word-choice error: 'bags' is incorrect in context; the question asks about bikes, so use 'bikes'. The sentence structure is otherwise fine.

× We most people ride, umm, shared bikes to commute.

✓ Most people ride shared bikes to commute.

The correct word order places the quantifier 'Most people' at the start. Remove the filler 'umm' and the extraneous comma. The simple present 'ride' is correct for a general statement about current habits.