自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, verb tense consistency and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct common errors (use past tense: didn’t have; use singular/plural correctly; remove duplicate words). Also keep the answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one at the time, so I usually took the bus or other local public transport to school. Because of that, I became used to travelling with the crowd rather than cycling.

建议: Clarify meaning, use correct vocabulary, and give specific reasons with linking words. Begin with a direct statement, then explain why using clear linking words (for example, because, since, so). Avoid unclear words like “Whites” and remove redundant phrases.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. This is mainly because they are cheap and help people cut down their commute time, so many commuters prefer them over buses. For example, motorbikes are common among students and delivery workers who need to travel quickly through traffic.

× 'No I don't have a bike when I am.'

✓ 'No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

'When referring to the past, use the past tense and include the article before 'child'. Also add a comma after 'No' for clarity. Suggestion: Use past simple for past states: "I didn't have a bike when I was a child."'},{

× 'I was a child because my family can't afford.'

✓ 'I didn't have one because my family couldn't afford it.'

'Because' here explains the reason for not having a bike in the past, so use past tense consistently: 'didn't have' and 'couldn't afford'. Also replace vague pronoun usage with 'one' and 'it' to refer to the bike. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent when explaining past situations.'},{

× 'We are from a middle class family and we can't afford to have a bike on that time.'

✓ 'We were from a middle-class family and we couldn't afford a bike at that time.'

'Middle class' as a modifier needs a hyphen 'middle-class' and the sentence refers to the past, so use past tense verbs 'were' and 'couldn't'. Use 'at that time' for the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: Match tense and use correct article and phrasing for time expressions.'},{

× 'I often use bus or local public public transport to go to my school or college school.'

✓ 'I often used the bus or local public transport to go to my school or college.'

'Often' with a past context requires past tense 'used'. Use the definite article 'the' with 'bus' here. Remove the repeated word 'public' and avoid repeating 'school'. Suggestion: Keep vocabulary concise and match tense to the time being described.'},{

× 'Yes, I think so. Whites are very popular in our country because the people, because people use them for their.'

✓ 'Yes, I think so. Bikes are very popular in our country because people use them for their daily travel.'

'Whites' is incorrect; likely intended 'bikes'. Remove the repeated phrase 'because the people, because people' and complete the idea: 'for their daily travel'. Also avoid using 'their' without a noun. Suggestion: Use the correct noun and concise structure.'},{

× 'Put cut out their travel time and to save their time, they often use bikes more than public transport or buses.'

✓ 'To cut down their travel time and save time, they often use bikes more than public transport or buses.'

'Put cut out' is ungrammatical. Use the infinitive phrase 'to cut down' or 'to reduce' and parallel structure 'and save time'. Keep the subject 'they' and clarify comparison with 'public transport or buses'. Suggestion: Use clear verbs and parallel structure in coordinated verbs.'}]}]}