自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two brief supporting details in logical order. Use correct grammar for past actions (e.g., 'taught' not 'try to teach') and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'eventually' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My brother tried to teach me, but he couldn't explain it well. However, after practising on my own over several weeks, I eventually learned how to ride it confidently.

建议: Organise your answer with a clear topic sentence: state your general opinion, then give contrasting details about the tourist town. Use linking words such as 'however' and 'in contrast' and correct article and preposition use (e.g., 'in my hometown'). Be specific about reasons (cost, convenience, infrastructure). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

示例: In general, bikes are not very popular in Turkey because most people prefer cars or motorbikes for convenience and longer distances. However, in Kuşe̊ll (a tourist town) cycling is common because the area is flat, roads are bike-friendly and renting bikes is cheap.

× My brother tried to teach me how can I ride the bike but he didn't do that but and and I couldn't teach how can I ride.

✓ My brother tried to teach me how to ride the bike, but he didn't, and I couldn't learn how to ride.

The sentence uses incorrect word order and modal-like structure 'how can I ride' inside an indirect statement. When reporting an attempt or teaching, use the infinitive 'how to ride' rather than the question form 'how can I ride'. Also 'couldn't teach how can I ride' is incorrect because the student was the learner, so 'couldn't learn' is appropriate. Remove filler words ('but and and') and join clauses with commas and 'and' for clarity.

× Then after years and years I just have learned it to by myself have to ride it and I know know that.

✓ Then after years and years I finally learned to ride it by myself, and I know that now.

The original mixes present perfect 'have learned' with awkward word order 'learned it to by myself have to ride it' and duplicated words. For a past event completed long ago, simple past 'learned' is better. Use the infinitive 'to ride' after 'learned', place 'by myself' after the verb, and move 'now' to the end for natural word order.

× Actually, it's not so popular in Turkey for now, everyone has to try to get a motorbike or normal car, the regular one.

✓ Actually, it's not very popular in Turkey at the moment; most people try to get a motorbike or a regular car.

Use 'at the moment' instead of 'for now' for natural phrasing. 'Not so popular' is acceptable but 'not very popular' is more natural. 'Everyone has to try to get' is incorrect: 'most people try to get' expresses typical behavior. Add article 'a' before 'regular car'.

× But in the Kushell is a hometown for the tourism.

✓ But Kushell is a tourist hometown.

The original has incorrect word order and awkward noun phrase 'for the tourism'. Place the subject 'Kushell' before the verb and use the adjective 'tourist' to modify 'hometown'. Alternatively, 'Kushell is a popular tourist town' would also work.

× Everyone in that just get a bike.

✓ Everyone there just gets a bike.

Replace 'in that' with the appropriate adverb 'there'. Subject 'Everyone' is singular, so the verb must be 'gets' (third person singular). Keep 'just' before the verb for emphasis.

× It's so popular and it's so accessible and the road is so available for the bikes.

✓ It is very popular and very accessible, and the roads are suitable for bikes.

Avoid repeating 'so' three times; use 'very' or vary wording. 'The road is so available for the bikes' is ungrammatical—use plural 'roads' and 'suitable for bikes' or 'bike-friendly'. This fixes adjective usage and noun number.

× But in my hometown in Turkey, it's not an actually it's not so popular.

✓ But in my hometown in Turkey, it's actually not very popular.

The original repeats 'it's not' and misplaces 'actually'. Combine into a single clause: 'it's actually not very popular'. Use 'very' instead of 'so' for smoother register.