自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two supporting details. Avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases (e.g., “practicing writing” seems incorrect here). Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar (past tense consistency, articles).

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I wasn't interested in riding because I fell off a bicycle when I was about eight, which put me off for a long time.

建议: Good clear answer with contrast and reason. To improve, add a specific example or brief statistic and use a linking word to make the contrast sharper. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and vary vocabulary slightly.

示例: Yes, bikes are still popular. In the past many people used them for commuting, but nowadays more people cycle for leisure and exercise—for example, city parks and bike lanes are much busier at weekends.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was not interested in practicing writing because when I was about 8 years old I fell when I was riding bicycle.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was not interested in riding one; when I was about eight years old I fell while riding a bicycle.

Multiple issues: Use of 'practicing writing' is incorrect contextually and likely intended 'riding'; 'riding bicycle' needs the article 'a' and 'while' is a better conjunction for two simultaneous past actions. Also spell out numbers under ten (eight) for formal writing. The tense remains past simple, which fits the time frame. Suggestion: replace irrelevant phrase with 'riding one', add 'a' before 'bicycle', and use 'while' to link falling and riding. Use consistent past simple verbs: 'was not interested' and 'fell'.

× Absolutely. Years ago most people used bicycles as a means of transport to get to work, but now many ride them more for leisure and exercise.

✓ Absolutely. Years ago most people used bicycles as a means of transport to get to work, but now many ride them more for leisure and for exercise.

The original sentence is mostly correct in tense and meaning. The minor improvement is parallelism: use 'for leisure and for exercise' (or 'for leisure and exercise') to make the two purposes balanced. The verbs and tenses are appropriate: 'used' for past habitual action and 'ride' for present habitual action. Suggestion: keep tenses as they are and adjust wording for clearer parallel structure.