自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, correct grammar errors, use clear linking words and more specific details. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details (appearance and typical use). Correct tense and agreement, and avoid redundancy. For example, mention the color, size, who rode with you, and a brief memory or feeling to enrich the answer.

示例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a small brown bike with a sidecar that could carry one passenger, and my younger sister often rode with me. We used to cycle around our village every evening, which was fun because we could visit neighbors and enjoy the fresh air.

建议: Give a clear opinion, correct awkward phrasing, and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words such as 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and use the correct term 'e-bikes' or 'electric bicycles.' Mention who uses them or where you see them to add specificity.

示例: I think traditional bicycles are less popular now because many people prefer e-bikes for commuting. For example, in cities I often see delivery riders and office workers using electric bicycles since they make longer trips easier and faster.

× although it had a side car where two people can ride with you.

✓ although it had a sidecar where two people could ride with you.

The modal verb 'can' is present; because the sentence refers to a past situation ('it had'), the modal should be in the past form 'could' to match the time frame. Also 'side car' should be one word 'sidecar'. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent by using past modals when describing past events.

× It's color brown and the quite small.

✓ It was brown and quite small.

The original uses 'It's color brown' (incorrect structure) and mixes present 'It's' with past context. Use 'It was' for past description and follow with adjective 'brown'. Remove the extra article 'the' before 'quite small'. Suggestion: use 'It was + adjective' to describe past appearance.

× I used to ride that when we were going around our village with two.

✓ I used to ride it when we went around our village together as a family of three.

The original sentence ends with 'with two', which is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Used to' indicates habitual past, so follow with a clear subject and adverbial phrase. I replaced 'that' with pronoun 'it' and clarified 'with two' to indicate three people total (adjust if intended meaning was different). Suggestion: state who rode together explicitly (e.g., 'with my parents' or 'with two others').

× Nowadays bike bicycles are no longer as popular as it used to be before UMM.

✓ Nowadays bicycles are no longer as popular as they used to be before UMM.

Redundant words 'bike bicycles' should be 'bicycles'. Subject 'bicycles' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' and the verb 'used' should match 'they' ('they used to be'). Suggestion: avoid redundancy and ensure pronoun-antecedent number agreement.

× Today it is the E bike which is electronic bicycles that are that are often seen in the roads.

✓ Today it is the e-bike, which refers to electric bicycles that are often seen on the roads.

Use 'e-bike' with a hyphen and lower-case 'e' as common noun. 'Electronic' is wrong form; 'electric' is correct adjective for bicycles. Remove the repeated 'that are'. Use 'on the roads' rather than 'in the roads'. Also 'it is the e-bike' is awkward; better to say 'e-bikes' as the general subject. Suggestion: use plural 'e-bikes' for general statements and correct preposition 'on' for roads.