自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ответ слишком короткий и недостаточно информативный. Следует давать тематическое предложение, затем одно-два уточняющих предложения с деталями (когда, как часто, зачем, с кем). Используйте связующие слова для связности (for example, when, so, because). Постарайтесь не превышать 5 предложений и избегать повторов.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bicycle that I used almost every day when I was about eight years old. For example, I often rode it to visit my friends and to go to the park, which helped me become confident on the road.

建议: Ответ содержит повторы и разговорное обращение, нет деталей или объяснения. Нужно дать чёткое тематическое предложение и добавить 1–2 конкретных причины или примера, используя связующие слова (because, therefore, for instance). Избегайте ненужных слов как "ma'am" и повторов.

示例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For instance, in cities there are dedicated bike lanes and many students ride to school, so cycling is both practical and common.

× Yes, it's it's so popular, ma'am.

✓ Yes, they are very popular, ma'am.

The student used 'it's' (it is) twice which is incorrect because 'bikes' is plural and requires the plural pronoun/verb 'they are' or 'they're'. Also the repetition 'it's it's' is an unintended duplication. Replace with 'they are' for correct subject-verb agreement and remove duplication. Suggestion: use 'they are' or the contraction 'they're' and avoid repeating words accidentally.