自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy ("my own" and "own one"), and start with a direct topic sentence. Add one or two specific supporting details and use a linking word to improve coherence.

示例: No, I didn't have my own bike as a child. Instead, I often borrowed my older sister's bike to run errands for my mother, such as going to the market to buy groceries. Because the bike wasn't mine, I was always careful and rode mostly on quiet streets to avoid accidents.

建议: Your answer communicates an opinion but has grammatical errors and informal fillers ("uh"). Be concise: give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one example. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") and correct phrasing (e.g., "people here").

示例: Not really; bikes are not very popular where I live. This is because many people prefer cars and pay little attention to air pollution. However, I try to cycle more often to reduce my carbon footprint, for example by riding to work twice a week instead of driving.

× I sometimes rode my older sister's bike to run around for my mother and buy groceries, but I never had my own one.

✓ I sometimes rode my older sister's bike to run errands for my mother and buy groceries, but I never had my own.

The phrase 'my own one' is incorrect; English uses 'my own' without 'one' when the noun is clear. Also 'run around for my mother' is unnatural; 'run errands for my mother' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: drop the redundant 'one' and use natural collocations like 'run errands.'

× Not really, because in here where I live, people really don't care about the nature and uh, the air pollution.

✓ Not really, because where I live, people really don't care about nature or air pollution.

The preposition 'in' before 'here' is unnecessary; say 'where I live.' 'Care about the nature' is incorrect: 'nature' is uncountable and does not need 'the' in this context. Also use 'or' to connect the two nouns. Suggestion: remove extra 'in', drop the article before 'nature', and use 'or' between items.

× But me, for myself, I try my best to keep it as important thing in my mind and try to use bikes, uh, more than cars.

✓ But I, for my part, try my best to keep it in mind as something important and try to use bikes more than cars.

'Me, for myself, I' is ungrammatical; the subject should be 'I.' 'Keep it as important thing in my mind' has word order and article errors: use 'keep it in mind as something important' or 'keep it in mind as an important thing.' Also 'use bikes, uh, more than cars' is fine but remove filler 'uh' and extra comma. Suggestion: use 'I' as subject, correct word order, add 'something' or 'an' before 'important thing,' and eliminate fillers.