自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, use correct tense and vocabulary, and organise ideas with linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), briefly give a reason, and finish with a short consequence. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (bike vs bicycle, drive vs learn to drive).

示例: No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child. My parents thought it was risky because they often saw accidents on the news, so they preferred I learn to drive a car later. As a result, I usually played with friends on foot or used public transport instead of cycling.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (because, therefore, for example). Use more precise vocabulary (affordable, convenient, fuel-efficient) and avoid repeating the same point. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, motorcycles and scooters are very popular in my country. They are more affordable and fuel-efficient than cars, and they are easier to maneuver in heavy traffic. For example, many commuters use scooters to reach work faster during rush hour, so overall people prefer bikes for daily travel.

× No, I don't have a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The examiner asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'don't have' (present) is incorrect in this context; change to 'didn't have' to match the past reference. Suggestion: Use past simple ('didn't have') when referring to past possessions.

× Instead of bike I have bicycle.

✓ Instead of a bike, I had a bicycle.

Missing article and wrong tense. 'bike' and 'bicycle' need an article; the context is past, so use 'had' not 'have'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'a bike' and 'a bicycle' and match past tense ('had').

× I ride that with my friends.

✓ I rode it with my friends.

Tense and pronoun choice. The speaker refers to the past, so use 'rode' (past of 'ride') and 'it' is the correct pronoun for 'bicycle' instead of 'that'. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs and appropriate object pronouns ('it').

× When I was a child my father didn't give me a bike because it was a little risky and we see the accidents in news like a bike cycle is little bit more risky than a car.

✓ When I was a child my father didn't give me a bike because it was a little risky and we saw accidents in the news; a bicycle is a bit more risky than a car.

Mixed tenses and articles. 'didn't give' is correct but 'we see' should be past 'we saw' to match the time frame. 'accidents in news' needs article 'the' and plural 'accidents'. 'bike cycle' is redundant; use 'bicycle'. 'little bit' should be 'a bit' and include 'than a car' for comparison. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistently, use definite article for 'news' and correct comparative phrasing ('a bit more risky than a car').

× Instead my father suggest me to drive a car and.

✓ Instead, my father suggested that I learn to drive a car.

Wrong verb form and structure. 'suggest' should be past 'suggested' to match context, and 'suggest someone to do' is unidiomatic in English; use 'suggested that I...' or 'encouraged me to...'. Also complete the sentence; 'and.' is incomplete. Suggestion: Use 'suggested that I' or 'encouraged me to' plus base verb, and finish the thought.

× Yeah, bikes are the most popular thing in my country because there are more affordable and like they are easy to drive and everything because there is a traffic problem in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are more affordable and easy to ride, and there is a traffic problem.

Word choice and grammar. 'the most popular thing' is awkward; 'very popular' or 'one of the most popular forms of transport' is better. 'there are more affordable' is incorrect structure; use 'they are more affordable'. 'drive' is odd for bicycles; use 'ride'. Repetition of 'in my country' is redundant. Suggestion: Use 'they are' to refer to bicycles, 'ride' for bikes, and avoid repeating phrases.

× So that's why people prefer bike and it's like cheap more than car.

✓ So that's why people prefer bicycles; they are cheaper than cars.

Comparative form incorrect. 'cheap more than car' is ungrammatical; use the comparative 'cheaper than cars'. Also pluralize 'bicycles' or use 'a bike' consistently. Suggestion: Use comparative adjectives properly: 'cheaper than cars'.

× So that's why people prefer bike rather than a car.

✓ So that's why people prefer bicycles to cars.

'Prefer X rather than Y' is less natural than 'prefer X to Y'. Also use plurals for general statements: 'bicycles' and 'cars'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer A to B' and plural nouns for general preferences.