自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with tense and article use, keep answers concise and natural, and add a brief specific detail to enrich the response. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “super, super”).

示例: Yes, I did. I received a bicycle as a surprise on Christmas when I was eight, and I was thrilled because I could ride to my friend’s house every afternoon. For example, I remember learning to ride on the quiet path by our park, which made that Christmas very memorable.

建议: Use correct words (e.g., ‘kids’ not ‘kicks’), avoid filler sounds, and organize ideas more clearly with linking words. Start with a clear general statement, then give two specific examples (one about children, one about adults) using words like ‘for example’ or ‘in addition’. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children ride bikes to school and gather in groups in the evenings, and in addition, some adults, including my mother, use a bicycle for short commutes to work because it is convenient and economical.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I had.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use the simple past tense. 'Have' is present tense and 'have got' present perfect; the correct simple past response is 'I had.' Use past tense to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use 'I had' or 'Yes, I did' to answer past possession questions.

× And I actually got it in Christmas as a surprise and I was super, super happy after that.

✓ And I actually got it at Christmas as a surprise, and I was super, super happy.

Use 'at Christmas' not 'in Christmas' — 'at' is the correct preposition for holiday periods. The phrase 'after that' is unnecessary and slightly awkward here; simple past 'I was ... happy' is sufficient. Also keep punctuation by adding a comma before 'and.' Suggestion: Use 'at Christmas' for holidays and avoid redundant time phrases.

× Yes, especially among kicks.

✓ Yes, especially among kids.

This is a spelling error: 'kicks' should be 'kids.' It is a noun referring to children; using the correct word is essential for meaning. Suggestion: Proofread for typos and ensure the intended noun 'kids' is used.

× Uh, all the kids have a bike when they have to go to the school on, when they are hanging out together, you see all the groups of kids with little bikes.

✓ All the kids have a bike when they have to go to school, and when they are hanging out together you see groups of kids with little bikes.

Remove the article 'the' before 'school' because 'go to school' is the correct idiomatic expression. The original has awkward repetition and a misplaced fragment 'on,' so combine clauses with 'and' and streamline the sentence. Also remove redundant 'all the' before 'groups.' Suggestion: Use 'go to school' and connect related clauses clearly: '...go to school, and when they are hanging out together, you see groups of kids with little bikes.'

× Even my mom, when she goes to work, she tends to use the bike.

✓ Even my mom, when she goes to work, tends to use a bike.

Avoid repeating the subject 'she' in the subordinate clause; after the introductory phrase 'Even my mom,' use the main clause 'tends to use a bike.' Also use the indefinite article 'a' before 'bike' since it is a non-specific singular noun. The present tense 'goes' and 'tends' are correct for habitual action. Suggestion: Omit the repeated subject and include the appropriate article: 'Even my mom, when she goes to work, tends to use a bike.'