自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Correct the tense and make the response natural and slightly extended. Begin with a clear topic sentence using past tense, then add one brief supporting detail (where or how often you rode, or who you rode with). Keep it under five sentences and use a linking phrase if you add details.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it to visit my grandparents every weekend, and I practiced riding with my older cousin until I felt confident.

建议: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and avoid unclear phrases. Use correct grammar (e.g., “older women” or “grown women”), and include linking words like “because” or “however” to make your answer coherent. Provide one or two concise specific reasons or examples.

示例: I don't think bikes are very popular among everyone in my country. Mostly children and men ride bikes, because many women, especially older women, prefer other transport due to cultural reasons and safety concerns.

× Yes, I had a bike when I am a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes past tense 'had' with present tense 'am'. The time phrase 'when I was a child' refers to the past, so the verb must be past tense. Use 'was' (past of 'am/is') to match 'had' and the past time reference. Suggestion: keep both verbs in past tense for consistency: 'I had... when I was...'.

× Actually, it's not so popular when it's a big woman.

✓ Actually, it is not very popular among grown women.

'It's a big woman' wrongly uses 'it' and 'big woman' to refer to people; 'it' should not refer to people and 'big' is unnatural for adults. Also the preposition 'among' is correct for talking about a group. Use 'grown women' or 'adult women' and 'among' to indicate who finds bikes unpopular. Suggestion: use 'among grown women' or 'with adult women'.

× It's just for the children and the men who can use it in our country.

✓ They are mostly for children and for men who know how to ride them in our country.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'It's' (it is) incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural); use 'they' for plural. 'The children' and 'the men who can use it' is awkward; use 'children' and 'men who know how to ride them'. Also 'can use it' is vague; 'know how to ride them' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number and use natural phrasing for ability/skill.