自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (word order, articles, pronouns). Keep it within 3–4 sentences. For example: say you didn’t own a bike, explain how you used your dad’s bike, mention when or how often, and finish with a brief feeling or consequence.

示例: I didn’t own a bike as a child, but I often used my dad’s. For example, every weekend we would ride together around the neighborhood, which helped me learn balance and gain confidence. I really enjoyed those rides because they were a chance to spend time with my dad.

建议: Avoid hesitations and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, so). Mention who rides bikes, when, and why to make your answer specific. Keep answers concise (2–3 sentences).

示例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for both exercise and short commutes. For instance, families and young professionals often cycle in parks or on dedicated lanes at the weekend, so biking is both a social and healthy activity.

× I didn't have a bike by on my own, but I had a bike using I. I used my dad's bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike of my own, but I had one I could use. I used my dad's bike.

The original sentence contains incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'by on my own' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'of my own' (preposition use). 'I had a bike using I' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I had one I could use' to convey ability/possession. Also 'one' avoids repeating 'bike'. Suggestion: use 'of my own' for personal possession and a clear relative clause 'I could use'.

× Of course bikes are popular in in my country umm, people usually ride ride a bike on the weekends as they exercise.

✓ Of course bikes are popular in my country. People usually ride a bike on the weekends to exercise.

Errors include a duplicated preposition 'in in', filler 'umm', repeated verb 'ride ride', and awkward connector 'as they exercise'. Remove the extra 'in' and filler, reduce repeated words, and use 'to exercise' to express purpose (correct preposition/infinitive use). Also split into two sentences or use a comma with correct punctuation for clarity. Replace 'as' with 'to' to indicate purpose rather than simultaneous action.