自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question in past tense and be direct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) and add one or two brief supporting details (who gave it, how you used it, or why you didn’t have one). Keep it under five sentences and use simple linking words if needed.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school. Occasionally I borrowed a neighbour’s bike to ride in the park.

建议: Begin with a clear opinion sentence (Yes/No/Somewhat) and use correct phrasing: “In my opinion” or “I think”. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and give a specific reason or example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Keep answers concise (1–3 sentences).

示例: I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people cycle to work or the market, especially in crowded cities where parking is difficult.

× When I have a child, I don't have a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike.

The student used present tense 'have' and 'don't have' while the question asks about the past ('when you were a child'). This is a tense error (present vs past). Use past simple 'was' and 'didn't have' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for past time references (subject + did not + base verb or subject + was/were).

× On my opinion, there are more people enjoy using a bike when when they want to go uh here and there, and it is very nice for being.

✓ In my opinion, more people enjoy using bikes when they want to go here and there, and it is very convenient.

Multiple errors: 'On my opinion' is wrong preposition; correct phrase is 'In my opinion' (preposition error). 'There are more people enjoy' mixes existential 'there are' with a clause; use 'more people enjoy' (sentence structure/subject-verb). 'Using a bike' is acceptable but plural 'bikes' fits general statement (singular/plural issue). The repeated 'when when' is a repetition error. 'here and there' is fine, but 'it is very nice for being' is ungrammatical; 'convenient' or 'pleasant' is correct adjective choice. Suggestions: use 'In my opinion', avoid unnecessary 'there are' before a noun phrase acting as subject, match plural when speaking generally, remove duplicate words, and choose appropriate adjectives (convenient) to describe usefulness.