自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with tense and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (because the question asks about childhood), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a bright red bicycle with a wicker basket on the front, and I rode it to my friend’s house every afternoon. It was light and easy to handle, which made learning to ride fun and safe.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and provide specific examples using linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Mention facts or reasons briefly and use a cohesive connector (e.g., because, for example, also) to organize details.

示例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in China because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many cities have shared-bike programs with rows of dockless bikes parked on sidewalks, so people can easily rent one with a phone app for short trips.

× 'Yeah, I do have a bike and it's a really beautiful red bike.'

✓ 'Yeah, I had a bike and it was a really beautiful red bike.'

'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is a past time question, so the student's response should use past tense. Using present tense ('do have', 'it's') mismatches the time reference. Suggestion: change verbs to past tense ('had', 'was') to match the question.'

× 'Yeah, yes, bikes are very popular and I believe everyone can can ride a bike.'

✓ 'Yeah, yes, bikes are very popular and I believe everyone can ride a bike.'

'can can' is a repetition error and not grammatical; only one modal auxiliary 'can' is needed. Also 'everyone can ride a bike' is correct subject-verb agreement with modal 'can' + base verb. Suggestion: remove the extra 'can' and keep 'can ride'.'

× 'You can see in China, ours umm, our street side have a lot of bike that can share with everyone, everyone can rent them to.'

✓ 'You can see in China, on the streets we have a lot of bikes that people can share with everyone; anyone can rent them.'

Several preposition and article issues: 'in China' is fine, but 'our street side' is incorrect—use 'on the streets' or 'along the streets'. 'Have' should be 'we have' to include a subject. 'a lot of bike' needs plural 'bikes'. 'that can share with everyone' incorrectly uses passive/agent — better 'that people can share with everyone' or 'available for everyone to share'. 'everyone can rent them to' uses incorrect particle 'to' at end; remove 'to' or use 'rent them' or 'rent them out'. Suggestion: rephrase as above to fix prepositions, articles, plurality and sentence flow.'